Paranoia

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Paranoia. Kai/Krystal. 2,103 words. 

Krystal didn't believe Kai would just leave her like that. 

Warning : unbetaed, violence(?)

Foreword

I actually passed this piece to my Creative Writing prof last sem. Haha! Took creative writing and we had to produce a literary folio so I had to make one short story. I was hesitating whether I should post this or not, bec well, it's trash, but.. I've decided to post it for feedbacks! 

Idea's inspired by a fanfic I've read before. 

Comments are appreciated! 

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viviyenvivo #1
the storyline is exceptionally unique. you've improved a lot compared to the ones you wrote before in class. HAHAHAHA. But I think, in a work such as this, you could have put more descriptions,you know, get more detailed about things, be more aware of the surroundings that would probably have an effect on the character. it would have helped others from being too confused. still, the word choices are good and considering tht this is a fanfic, you've done pretty well. i'm being absolutely honest. good job friend. <3
nisaffxtion #2
I-- oh god. I don't quite understand. Is krystal going nuts? If yes, then kai doesn't really exist. And the hand that touches her bruise in front of the mirror is her own hand. Am i got it correctly? Geez, does she self cutting?
krystalfangirl #3
So mysterious..
Love it <3
HappyPistachio #4
Chapter 1: AH! SO GOOD! So sweet! :)
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