Title [2.5/5]

To be very honest, I usually don't read stories with this title. As I skimmed through your foreword and description, I saw the old title. I thought it was better than the current one, so I took of one point. Another point is for being very cliché. This title is overused. You can tell if you just search the title up on Google– hundreds of stories and fan fictions will pop up. The last half of a point is because of incorrect capitalization in your title. Instead of "Falling For You," it should be "Falling for You." You can check if your title is right here.

Description/Foreword [8/10]

I didn't completely understand the description. All those quotes were sort of confusing, but it made the story seem promising. The foreword was not put to use, though. I took off two points for that. You could've used up that space with maybe an excerpt from the story or even a short diary entry from the main character. The character profiles and pictures were not needed; if you describe them well enough, the reader can already picture them in their heads.at.

Characterization [15/20]

Only three characters were characterized descriptively and amazingly: Eun Mi, Chunji, and L.Joe. I know they are the main characters and the other characters don't matter very much, but it would've been nice if you had described Niel, Ricky, and the others more to make the story more interesting. Five points were taken off for that.

Plot/Originality [10/20]

This plot is not original at all– a girl falling for her best friend is not unusual on AFF. When the girl's best friend's best friend falls for her, . . . well, you get the gist of it. I took off eight points for that. Those twelve points that you still have are because I've rarely read TeenTop stories, and this is pretty original. I mean, you didn't say one word about a gang in this story, which was very original. In AFF, anyway.

Mechanics (Grammar, Spelling & Punctuation) [2/5]

I know you mentioned that English wasn't your first language, but grammar is my forté, so I'm being harsh right now. Some mistakes are:

Eun Mi had a friend whom is named Chunji. – Eun Mi had a friend who was named Chunji.
The lesson was boring and made Eun Mi yawning a lot during it. – The lesson was boring and made Eun Mi yawn a lot.
"Now, he is mad at me. I shouldn't yelled at him!" Eun Mi whispered to herself. – "Now he's mad at me. I shouldn't have yelled at him!" Eun Mi whispered to herself.

Those were only a few. I recommend a beta - reader of some sort.

Reader's Response [4/5]

I read it once and I would recommend to other people, but it's not something I would re-read. It didn't affect my feelings much, either.

Overall Enjoyment [8/10]

As I said previously, I enjoyed it, but I wouldn't re-read it. The grammar parts also irritated me. I could be your beta-reader, if you wouldn't mind, but if you do, get one!

Bonus (3/5) : The poster from Chapters 7 – 9 was lovely.

Total : 53.5/75 

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