His p.o.v:
"im o.k now.." she wispers and push me gantlley away from her, standes up and wiping the rest of her tears with a sad smile on her lips. after a few secend's of silence she said quietly "thank you.." and run away.
Chapter 1: Hi. Thought I'd give this a try.
This is something new since there aren't names for the characters.
I'd say this can be real sweet, but it's quite difficult to read and quite confusing due to the lack of spacing, no upper case, and no separation between the story and comments.
You have a nice storyline there. It'll help with more spacing.
Good luck in writing. =)
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