Chapter Three

Vortex // 소용돌이
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Chapter Three

 

The voice inside his head was becoming more and more loud – clearer as the days pass by.

It started with an unusual headache, followed by a wave of nausea. It lingered inside his mind like a living host, pushing into the depths of his thinking and of his emotion.

It was like being tortured, but worse.

No, it was not painful like that – it was like having something moving inside your brain, trying to take control. Whatever it was had been silent, slowly penetrating his mind’s control over his body until he would black out in drowsiness and of fear.

He was aware of it, at first. But on the second week, it spoke.

Find him, it said. Find him and bring him to me.

The voice sounded ancient: old and voluminously powerful. It ringed into his brain and into his whole system until he found himself unconsciously chanting the words in his sleep.

Find him and bring him to me.

He can’t let this slip out – won’t let them know. He would thrash at his room, scream at himself and tear out his hair and let his spit fly out, and he can’t breathe. He can’t breathe and he wanted to breathe but the thing inside him, that voice inside him, told him when he should and when he should not.

Suffocating, dreadful, horrible.

Find him and bring him to me.

He found himself always nodding, blood writhing in an inhumane hunger for viciousn

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brand new prologue is up.

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fireheart
#1
Joke! Cool playlist, though!
fireheart
#2
:3 I know what will happen -
Kaisoolicious
#3
Chapter 1: I'm with Tobiowasaki
Tobiowasaki
#4
UHH I KINDA DONT WANT SUHO TO THE KAISOO TRAIN TO WILL THAT CHANGE?
FlamingDongSaeng
#5
Chapter 1: Hello! I feel like this fic has great potential and I feel obligated to give criticism. I don't know if the fic is the same here and on wattpad(i read from wattpad) but these are what I have to say:

1. The story is well written, almost the same style as Cassandra Clare's, actually.
2. Do you have an editor? This is crucial because I saw that you planning to reproduce this, if ever? There are a lot of grammatical hooplas going on, recurring ones that need to be fixed(subject-verb agreement) , although you may have knowledge of this already.
3. Some information are incoherent and it leaves plot holes. Like, Kyunsoo called Jongin as Jongin even though he introduced himself as Kai when they first met.

I really feel that you should know because as I said, this has great potential since it is written do well, aesthetically, and the technicalities need work.

But good job on this, authornim! :D
virus-
#6
ahhhh sequel !!
theeastsea #7
ack, i feel like i read the ending too hastily to know if suho really loved kyungsoo or not.. but. ah. is that up for interpretation or was it really an act? the... tears after speaking to his father says otherwise? ah ah aha ha gotta read the sequel!
kurama-ssi
#8
Chapter 27: sweet! this sounds awesome ^^
blueskysoo
#9
Chapter 23: so so what would happen now????
i think i missed a lot of updates -_-

will you update angelfall soon?? hehehe
HelluvaButlr
#10
Chapter 27: wahh i would totally love to have the book ^^ considering i love this story a lot. wow 300+ pages.