Chapter 9: I love this story! It's really cute. You could work on the grammatical errors, though I think it's understandable considering English isn't your first language. Other than that, all the chapters are really cute. Update soon! :D
Chapter 18: Well Basically, YoYo is not her Favourite Oppa, so that kinda goes on she not liking him, because she just said that she wants to marry a lanky guy like Doojoon XD lol, she didn't really mention yoseob, or say she liked him once this hole story(she might of, but never like, a like like , like she does with doojoon) kinda sad really, poor SeobSeob <3 Update soon Ya? ^^
Chapter 13: Hold on Sec!, Yoseob Say WaeYO? to Yuja but isn't Yuja Younger than him?, if you didn't know when you add a YO at the end, it means your being polite to your Olders/Elders, if you just say WAE then you say that to your friend or someone who's younger then you, E.g./ FOY=Friend or Younger
FEO= For Elders/Olders/
Wae=FOY/ Waeyo= FEO
Bwo=FOY/ Bwoyo=FEO
Jeongmal (really/Truthfully)=FOY/
Jeongmalyo= FEO
Yeogi (over here) = FOY/ Yeogiyo=FEO, Like not every word but some words ^^ just ask me for duh understanding or Further Info
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