Title [5/5]

Plot [19/20]
The story was pretty short, but it had good amounts of suspense and mystery.

Originality [19/20]
It's nice how that even though its really short, its original, and has a unique plot about a sick person and how hard it is to tell even those close to you.

Character Personality [10/10]
The character's personalities fit them, and showed the closeness of those one loves.

Fluency [10/10]
The story flowed from one scene to the next with good transitions.

Captivation [14/15]
The story was really interesting, and the suspense kept me reading, even though it was only 2 chapters.

Lingering/Pacing [10/10]
The pace between scenes was good- not too fast, not too slow.

Grammar/ Spelling [9/10]
The grammar and spelling was good. only one or two mistakes though.

Review by fyresword

 

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