✽ { Abhor } by jjang017
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☆ Abhor ☆
by: jjang017
//TITLE: (5/5)
It’s really unique for me! No one else had this title yet. It’s also one of those really uncommon English words that I find fancy (in my opinion n_n;;)
//DESCRIPTION & FOREWORD: (5/5)
The way you put it is really beautiful. It’s really something that readers would get attracted to.
//WRITING STYLE & APPEARANCE: (4/5)
The pictures and gifs fit with the theme of your story perfectly, it’s just that the poster’s green(is it? Or cyan?) overlay is quite too much that somehow ruins a bit of the mood. But then, this is beautifully written.
//PLOT: (18/20)
I could say that she is pessimistic, but I can’t really see how much pessimistic she could be at the current chapters. These chapters as of now are more of an introduction, as what I would put them into. But it is something worth looking forward to. Hello bb you gained a subbie n_n
//ORIGINALITY: (20/20)
This is the first time I came across a pessimistic-centric fic, to be honest! Almost all the others have this optimistic or bubbly feeling but this has a lot of dislike, loathe, and yes, abhor.
//FLOW: (14/15)
I could go along with it just well.
//CHARACTERS: (15/15)
Man I got the chills with Sojung. You described their actions and feelings perfectly.
//GRAMMAR & SPELLING: (14/15)
I want to correct these.
“She kept her words hidden, she hated talking even, she writes her words and thoughts and hides them…”
I think a better way to put this is “She kept her words hidden; she hated talking even. She writes her…”.
“Sojung talked and talked, as if she was a free lady.”
“… as if she were a free lady.”. Back at our review, I was told that in a sentence like this, “were” is the one to use.
I think I found a few more, too, but those are unnoticeable, thus can be ignored.
//OTHER REMARKS:
I’m not into Ladies’ Code, but I do agree she’s really pretty lol ;u; another fic I enjoyed doing a review of! \ ^o^ /
//t o t a l: (95/100)
;o; omg highest score so far. you've made it to my recommendations!! <3
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