Chapter 1: I guess I'm not good at reading between the lines, but what was the man doing in the park? And did myungsoo bite him on the neck to kill him? I'm confused there. But overall it seemed pretty cool :)

Chapter 1: Came here from your blog post ^^

Honestly, I'm not at all familiar with this 'Kafkaesque' thing, but I did a little research. And from what I'm skimming through (I don't have time to read now, but I'll probably find some time tomorrow ^^), I wouldn't consider it entirely kafkaesque unless it was /totally/ screwed up. like really, really screwed up. What you're writing seems to be what I usually write: angst/psychological (psychological only from what i can tell from the direction you're going in) I mean, it's distorted with the MPD but not enough to be considered kafkaesque in my opinion, if that makes sense?

lol you definitely do not need to mark this as m. i think i've written really icky gore and horror, but i've never rated it m. what i would do is put a little section in the foreword. something like this:

rating - pg-13
warning - contains gore.

I mean, Myungsoo/L might be some crazy, wacko person but probably not enough to be marked as m, you know?

hope this helped ^^