24 hours

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“What would you do if you fell for a person who only has 24 hours to live? Will you hide it and keep it to yourself? Or will you do everything to make every second worthwhile...”

 

"For once in my life I want to do something that I feel is right! For once, I want to feel that I'm also an ordinary person who can atleast make someone happy not just by singing and dancing but also by doing good things. For once... I don't want to smile fakely in front of someone else. But I want her to know how I really feel so she would know that she's not alone in this world"

 

"Thank you. I don't know how to say it because words can't really do much this time because what you did for me is something one can't easily forget. You made me experience everything within 24 hours. And most of all, I learned what it feels like to fall in love. I want you to know that a second with you feels like a year. And during those 24 hours, I feel like I've completed everything, even growing old with you. I want you to know that I'll be your biggest fan even in heaven. I don't want goodbye to be my last word but it seems like it's the end for me. Thank you for being my first and last love"

Foreword

 

‘Tomorrow might be my last day’ I thought sadly. I raised an arm that is covered by my long sleeves. Rolling my sleeves, my bruised and pale arm was showed to me. It seems like I couldn’t remember a time when there aren’t any marks on my body. Looking around the room, I can’t even remember a time when I enjoyed myself fully or when I went outside with my friends. Come to think of it, I never really have friends. I’m just stuck here in our house and only go out for my treatment.
 
Bringing my arms down, I look up “Why? Why did you choose me to suffer in a state like this? What have I done to deserve this?” I shouted hoping ‘He’ would hear me. My parents immediately rushed to my room as I started shouting and crying. “Why can’t I just have a normal life?” my mother hugged me as she my hair while my father’s hand is on my right shoulder. I don’t know how long we stayed at that position, but all I know is that it’s a long time.
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madamX #1
Chapter 1: I really like your concept! It's great and I can see you taking this in many different directions. Just a precaution for writing stories with diseases, make sure you do some research on the symptoms and the disease itself. There's nothing more disrespectful than an authour who writes a story about a disease but gets all the facts wrong. Please, if possible, don't pull a Deux ex machina without circumstantial narrative backing. :D I'm sure you'll be fine though. :) I love the way you've introduced your character, it's a very heart-wrenching scene full of tears and sadness. I will be waiting to see what you do with your character. I applaud you for choosing to write in the present tense. This is quite a difficult tense to write in, be careful with your tenses and make sure your subject-verb agreement is correct. A few times, you'll slip from present into past tense, make sure everything agrees. (I'm totally guilty of this too, don't worry). If you want, check your msg box, I'll have a few more things to say there because I think this comment is turning out to be too long... anyways, great introduction, I'm looking forward to seeing what you'll be doing with this.
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