Enséñame

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I'm worried anda little scared. I know that you can leave me at any moment simply because I don't know how to act. 

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awkwardtortoise #1
Chapter 1: This is beautiful!!! <3 <3
suibian #2
Chapter 1: Holly Cow!!!! this is effing cute fluffy and full of matureness!!! <3~
love it !!
mink_amiel23 #3
Chapter 1: ahh... this is so sweet~~~
ing #4
Chapter 1: ¡Como me encanta que tenga una frase en español!
wtvr, is so so so beautiful, I feel like reading a love song <3
Mr_Koala #5
Chapter 1: Kyahhhhhhhhhhhhhh
THAT WAS SO CUTEEE
ER MEHGAWD
MY KRISYEOL FEELS ARE OVERFLOWING ;___;
FlameFlowerful #6
Chapter 1: HAH!

HAHHHHAHAHAHHA
I GRAB FIRST COMMENT /sits down on my pedestal eagerly.
and happily.


your writing is good - i mean. (first of all the moving background IS a little distracting) there were a few grammar mistakes but nothing that took away from the quality of the writing.

very rare to find fics written in first POV. and with 'you' in it? i'm not sure if this could classify as kris' voice characteristically, but i did feel /some/ of that insecurity of his. (i was looking for a krisyeol fic to read i guess? so yeah here i am).
maybe concentrating on less literal sayings would be good for this. (my eng teachers always said show don't tell)
but overall
the one thought kept flitting through my head reading this was: KRIS IS SO MUSHY AND CHEESY YES LOL WHAT A GREASY BALL OF CHeeeESEEEEEEEE
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