When The Clock Strikes

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Lee Jieun thinks she`s pathetic.
Here she is, in a party on New Years Eve, alone.
There is this tradition on this special holiday : the midnight kiss.
Even though all of herself denies it, she wants it - that kiss.
Only if, he would dare to show up.

Foreword

when the clock strikes

                                                                 Contest entry for

The Biased contest. (x)

                                                                             Prompts 

"I want to pester the watch more, but in the future, in which you are present, please just say my name." - IU's You & I

                                                                      Author's note

There's a small error on the title of the poster and banner.
It's not when then clock stikes, but When The Clock Strikes.
Please note that English isn't my first language.

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Roobix #1
I really love your poster and your background. I think the story is really great as well :)
peachtoki- #2
Chapter 1: Melts my heart <3 Sweet~
trixyBee #3
Chapter 1: I absolutely adore the progression here! <3 It's so smooth, and tenses at a steady pace until the beautiful final scene.
HansolLover #4
Always keep up the good work!
hottest7684 #5
Chapter 1: Awww! That was so sweet.
I know how she feels, being alone at a new years party. OTL

Great oneshot!! :)
contradictori #6
Chapter 1: so cute!! C:
ChubbyPinkPanda #7
Chapter 1: Awwwww I never read a oneshot this sweet!
This is just so cute!
Author-nim has such a cute imagination ^3^
elisaexplosive #8
Chapter 1: Oh God this was so cute!
I could totally see myself standing there going crazy myself (even though romantic things like that don't happen to me lol xD)
But the way IU thinks is very recognizable. I mean, the way she gets so agitated with every second that passes...It made the oneshot more thrilling in a weird way.
Because I knew that Onew would show up eventually, but what if he didn't? o.o
Okay, I'll stop rambling-
great oneshot! Loved it!

Keep writing, love! ♥
shin-oppa #9
Chapter 1: Such a sweet one-shot! :) As the hour keeps appearing, it pushes the reader along IU’s anxiety and increases the story’s emotional value. I enjoy how you’ve portrayed her, from a strong woman falling into a fragile creature that just needs love and security during an important night :D her thoughts become more and more chaotic as midnight comes closer, which is perfect and induces a thrilling sensation ^^ will he come, will he not? That game of hope is well paced without becoming exaggerated or rushed ^^

Two observations though - there are some grammar errors and wrong time tenses, but that could easily be fixed if you either take a beta or correct them yourself. I’m sure they will disappear with time as you keep on writing and writing ^^ another is the inclusion of Luna without being previously mentioned, but that could happen to anybody when ideas are flowing.

Due keep on writing! You have potential!

Lots of love <3
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