Chapter 1: It's certainly fluffy with a hint of comedic teasing and the first commenter is right in that it doesn't come off as a first fic. Any reason you vacillated between semicolons and colons to denote speakers during the texting sequence?

Aside from that, I appreciate the way you introduced us to Jaejoong and how he still respects those he works with first before finally getting up with his now boyfriend/lover. hehe And the final comment he makes at the end also made me giggle in regards to that. But I could easily see them teasing each other just like that too. I'm surprised Yunho didn't know exactly where Jaejoong was filming though. >.> haha Maybe Jae's just good at keeping secrets from Yunnie. lol

Their sequence together before heading into the bedroom was fast but judging from Yunho's mindset, that's expected. heh The only thing I might suggest for dialogue purposes is to have a tag of translations at the end or something for the Korean you chose to use. Some writers don't recommend using it at all, and I've been guilty of incorporating it myself, though for the uninitiated, it can be confusing when you stumble across 'palli' or 'waeyo' or any of the other terms without understanding what they mean.

Overall though, good job for a first go. ^_^ (on a side note, I'm sad I can't see the picture T_T - I don't think tumblr works in China)

Good to hear~ ^~^ / /

Chapter 1: Awwww this is hot...hahahaha like seriously...I love it^^

Chapter 1: this is a really great story!!
jae' waist is soooo small in the pic!!yun is so lucky to hold i everyday!!><

Chapter 1: Pft...so adorable. _____ _____ Yunho :D attacking Jae