Chapter 1: Its my very first time reading a lunafly's story, and thank you you don't make me disappointed <3
I keep repeating the song while I reading this, and I can get the mood perfectly with your story... Its cute at first, that makes me smile when I read that haha
but when it's come to the end... okay you make me abt to cry. that's soooo saaaddd T^T
but still, Im in love with ur story kkk~
thank you for making this, and keep writing! <3
Chapter 1: I like how you interpret the song into your own work. You use the weather as a metaphor and it really reflects the song. Instead of "you," I suggest that you use "I." It is more effective to the readers. Work on descriptive language than writing the action of the characters. (eg. She did this and that.) Avoid using the same verbs and "______". But overall, your story is great! I like it. There is creativity in your work and it is awesome. I hope you write more of your excellent stories in the future. Thank you for this.
Chapter 1: Thank you for made this fic and thanks god for letting me to found this fic! its so saaaaaad T_T
I kept replaying clear day, cloudy day and day by day when reading this
And its feels so hurt when I imagine yun's lifeless body lying on the street in front of me aaaaaaaagh
Chapter 1: I'm about to cry. Damnit. Reading this while listening to Kim Jongkook's man cry too. .. I believe that's what it's called. It's in Hangul writing. Anyways. Gosh.. I'm going to cry.. To sad. This was sad and cute and more sad!
Chapter 1: Such a beautiful story, it's just disappointing that I didn't know who was who for more than half of the story :(
Anyway, I still loved it ^^
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