Chapter 1: And... The transition between the characters is confusing. I dunno who's talking at first reading so I need a double take to understand. The words are good and you have a cool vocabulary bank but, yeah, as I said... It's confusing. Good job, anyway.
Chapter 1: Call me stupid but I cannot understand. I know the full context or your concept but this is really confusing me. Why doesn't GD like to have children in the 1st place? What was he afraid of? Why is his wife being desperate? So confusing @__@
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