Review by joanne200969
Valentine's Day
So 4726478163712737319841 years after finishing this, I had the sudden urge to send this in for a review because well, it's the only completed fic I have that isn't a oneshot and yeahhhh. Weird urges. Thanks again to joanne200969 at Lemonswirls for the review :D
Title: Valentine's Day
Author: jennyhearts
Reviewer: joanne200969 @ http://lemonswirls.visualchic.net/
Reviewer’s Note: Annyeong! ^^ joanne200969 here. XD haha lols, you’re my first requestor, so I thought I should make your comfortable reading this. ^_^ Sorry for my randomness and lameness…xD Anyway, let’s starting the review! (lol)
Title: 3/5
the title wasn’t really much of any creative or eye catching one, so I couldn’t give you any higher. However, it matches the plot, in which I added another mark for it.
Poster & Background & Trailer ( if there is) : /10
NIL, but I won’t count the marks in. However, best if you get a poster/background/trailer quick, since it would make the story look more eye catching.
Foreword: 6/10
Ne, everything was fine. The foreword and description was great, but somehow it made me confused. @_@ I mean, how would a girl hate Valentine’s Day while she actually wanted love on Valentine’s Day? Lols, I guess I’m not that much for a great reviewer after all. xD
Plot: 20 /25
Well- I don’t know how to say this. O_O The plot was actually great, but it’s used quite a lot. However, it was easy for me to read and understand, which I liked a lot. But due to the overused plot- I cannot give you any higher.
Flow: 7 /10
The flow is pretty good, however, the first chapter, it was a bit rushed.
Character Profiles ( if there is) & Characterization: 7/10
The characterization was great, I liked how was the girl made (did you give her a name O_O) but Junho was really just one of those good-looking boys from thousands of other fics.
Grammar, Spelling, etc: 8 /10
Yes, you’re actually pretty good at this! No big mistakes, however, there is a couple of sentences out of place. However, overall, it’s great! ^^
Writing Style: 3/5
Well, your writing style was great, but it did kinda bored me out a little. Maybe adding more descriptive words and more ‘interesting’ senses would be better.
Extra marks: 3/5
I’m not THAT much of a fan of 2pm (well, typically, I used to be a really huge fan, but after I saw SHINee I changed. Oh well, lol sorry for getting out of topic) but this fic made me like 2pm a little bit more I guess? xD
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
It was fine, but like I said in writing style, I did get a little bit bored.
Total: 67/95
the title wasn’t really much of any creative or eye catching one, so I couldn’t give you any higher. However, it matches the plot, in which I added another mark for it.
Poster & Background & Trailer ( if there is) : /10
NIL, but I won’t count the marks in. However, best if you get a poster/background/trailer quick, since it would make the story look more eye catching.
Foreword: 6/10
Ne, everything was fine. The foreword and description was great, but somehow it made me confused. @_@ I mean, how would a girl hate Valentine’s Day while she actually wanted love on Valentine’s Day? Lols, I guess I’m not that much for a great reviewer after all. xD
Plot: 20 /25
Well- I don’t know how to say this. O_O The plot was actually great, but it’s used quite a lot. However, it was easy for me to read and understand, which I liked a lot. But due to the overused plot- I cannot give you any higher.
Flow: 7 /10
The flow is pretty good, however, the first chapter, it was a bit rushed.
Character Profiles ( if there is) & Characterization: 7/10
The characterization was great, I liked how was the girl made (did you give her a name O_O) but Junho was really just one of those good-looking boys from thousands of other fics.
Grammar, Spelling, etc: 8 /10
Yes, you’re actually pretty good at this! No big mistakes, however, there is a couple of sentences out of place. However, overall, it’s great! ^^
Writing Style: 3/5
Well, your writing style was great, but it did kinda bored me out a little. Maybe adding more descriptive words and more ‘interesting’ senses would be better.
Extra marks: 3/5
I’m not THAT much of a fan of 2pm (well, typically, I used to be a really huge fan, but after I saw SHINee I changed. Oh well, lol sorry for getting out of topic) but this fic made me like 2pm a little bit more I guess? xD
Overall Enjoyment: 4/5
It was fine, but like I said in writing style, I did get a little bit bored.
Total: 67/95
Author’s Note: I’m sorry if the score was bad! Listen, it was quite good. This is actually one of the highest scores I given, actually. (Yep, my highest right now is 75. You’re not that far behind!). Continue writing and improving, and good luck! ^^
LOL, this was random. xD
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