what nooooo, why, *sob* I don't like this, you broke OnTae up. ;-(

It's a little... i don't know, underdeveloped. Quite short, but I'm not criticising you for that because I've seen very short creative pieces and I was crying/squealing. I just thought you could have gave the protagonist a little bit more of a character, show his theories why taemin/onew had broken up with him. The slightest hint i got is that the latter is too good for him. But no one's perfect so... Yeah. I could sympathise with him, but there's just not enough there to evoke emotion out of me... And yeahhh

This is kind of like onew POV