This is Wrong
Description
A slap across the face was all it took to make Junhyung realize what he had done was wrong.
Foreword
Title (2/5)
I think that the title is too bland for the story.
Poster/Background/Trailer (/10)
Description & Foreword (5/10)
Not much you can write for one-shot without giving too much away. But the single sentence was
interesting enough to make me want to read more.
Plot (6/10)
Interesting but I think you could do a lot more with what you have. I feel as if it was written half-
heartedly, like you had a spectacular idea and didn’t know what to do with it or something.
Originality (7/10)
Overall, it’s cliché but you gave it such an interesting twist that was completely unexpected.
Flow (4/5)
I suppose for a one-shot that it was good, but I think even for that you could have slowed down
and given us a little bit more.
Grammar/Punctuation/Spelling/Vocabulary (30/30)
Good.
Writing Style (5/10)
I’m sorry to say, but your writing style hasn’t improved from the last story I reviewed for you. It
still lacks so much which isn’t good because you have a lot of potential as a writer. My advice to
you is to find the really good author’s on the site and study their writing style. You can learn a
lot from trying to decipher how your stories and theirs compare.
Overall Enjoyment (5/10)
I do like the idea and I really think that if you made it into a multi-chaptered fic that it would be
a success. However, you still need to improve on your writing style for it to be something that I
actually enjoy a lot and want to read.
Total Score: 64/90%
reviewed by: Peacelovehugs
I'll improve! Yes!
Sometimes I wonder why I apply for a review when I know I LOL
Credits to peacelovehugs from ☺♫ Saranghae Review Shop ♫☺ for the review!
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