Chapter 1: Simply happy; I adore it!

I like the simplicity of this story and how cute it is. Good job!

Chapter 1: Wahhh!!! My fellow TaeKook author!!!! It was amazing. I liked it a lot. I love your writing.

I can tell Taehyung and Jungkook have a lot of chemistry between them. You gave lots of descriptions, so it was easy to understand your story. I don't have much to criticize except for a few things.

I saw a lot of run-on sentences. There were a lot of sentences that should have been split into two or more sentences. Instead, they were all pushed together with a comma. These run-on sentences really take away from your beautiful story.

Also Taehyung doesn't come off as a hippie. I can't think of one way to describe Taehyung based on your story. Tattoos... unless he has flowers and butterfly tattoos, when people read the word tattoos in books, they usually think gangs or bad boys. Also Taehyung's athletic... Jocks are athletic and popular. Is Taehyung a jock instead? In the foreword it says Taehyung's a hippie, so please describe how he's a hippie.

Lastly, this is more of a pet peeve, but your formatting was confusing. You didn't use double-space between your paragraphs and you didn't have indentation to start your paragraphs. It was confusing because it looked like one big jumbled block of text. Yes there was a small space between the paragraphs, but it's not big enough for my eyes to comprehend that it's a new paragraph. Could you please fix your formatting for the sake of my eyes. You can choose not to double-space, but then please indent the first sentences of the paragraph. Thank you~!!

Overall, I loved your story and I can't wait to read your next story.

Chapter 1: Fluffyyy!!!!! This is so damn cute!!! The unikorn is dancing on a rainbow for this story XD

Chapter 1: I LOVED this! You did a great job with character descriptions from physical to personality to other details. I did have to re-read the first few paragraphs because I got confused about who was being described. When all the characters have the same pronouns I find it's important to make sure we know who the "he" is or to just use names. Describing characters by hair color also isn't really helpful until we know who has what hair color. For example, I thought in the first paragraph Jungkook was just feeling himself and showing off how confident he is lol. Overall, great story. It was short and sweet but didn't feel rushed. Taehyung was y. Great job!

Chapter 1: Why is this so cute i'm crying T-T They are just too squishy.....wow, thank you for making this~~

Chapter 1: You slayed the description game yaaassss. When it comes to fanfiction, people always leave out character description since they know readers will prob know the person the story is about already, but you described tae and kookie so smoothly like one would in an original story *applause*. I love the plot and how it played out. Taehyung, you sly fox, keeping an eye on Jungkook keeping an eye on you lol. The setting was described well, the dialogue showcased their personalities well, overall this was a fun, cute and entertaining little story. Good job. The only thing I found awkward is how Tae called himself a hippie. I know he was being extra with describing the differences between him and Jungkook by dumbing down themselves into distinct characteristics, but idk, I feel like I just never hear the word "hippie" anymore, let alone do people describe themselves as that. "Free-spirited" is a good synonym I'd say, in case going forward you're ever looking for another way to basically say "hippie" that is less direct.

Chapter 1: Woah~ that escalated quickly but it was a nice read

Oh wow, eventhough i don't read much of stories or even vkook stories. But I love this pairing, watched them a lot actually.
Its really sweet how they notice each other,
I really enjoy reading this. Really love it.

Chapter 1: I have so many firsts today, reading fanfics I wouldn't normally read, thanks to heclgehog's Writing Club. X'D
I like how you literally took the appearance and event out of a fanart, it's really cute and nice. C: And also how the turns of events are.
This is a nice fic, me likey! :D