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Hwa Kyungeun

Hey everyone, this is co-author Ellie's OC and she's the only one officially chosen until the deadline date.

Please remember that everyone is equal here and I promise all OCs will get an equal amount of airtime. No one will be getting special treatment of any kind.

Click on her face claim to view her app. :)

Taken things: 
- Pristin's Jung Eunwoo as Face Claim
- The College Student Plotline
- Jeon Jungkook as love interest

Lee Areum

Seol's Review: 

Hey there Emmy, first off, thank you for being our first app! We’re so hyped right now, like you don’t even know XD And oh my goodness, don’t even apologize for writing a lot, that’s what we love to see, so thank you for trying to be detailed. :) Let’s get started!

Starting with the basics, everything looks good here. I really love Areum’s face claim, Seungyeon is gorgeous! Her nicknames are also very cute, I love how you included who calls her that and so on. I’m getting the intense feels from seeing her dad and brother’s sweet names for her, UGH!! Why do you have to kill us like this!? XD I also really appreciate the fact that you included her alias here for the underground criminal world. Black Beauty sounds so cool lol, I think it really fits her well. However, how did Areum learn English? She’s fluent because she wanted to learn it for coding and to help with hacking, but you never really explained where she learned this at. School or self-taught? I really like how you break down her appearance as well, she really is very pretty and her sharp features give her an edge that fits well with her personality. But GIRL, I’M DYING OVER HER STYLE! Like yes, this honestly is so realistic to me because she is trying to ward off any unwanted attention, due to her *cough* occupation *cough*, so the fact that you included her low-key outfits is so amazing. I don’t really think she’d be one to wear something super flashy, so the dark clothing and casual attire really blends. Plus points for you! Great job here! :D

Moving down to her personality section, I really adore your choice in traits. She has a very strong personality type and everything you picked out fits like a glove. I honestly love characters with a more aloof and cold personality, so yes!! XD She’s very realistic to me, you don’t try too hard to make her likeable or into something she isn’t, she’s likeable in her own way. However, on the breakdown, you really need to add a bit more to this section. You don’t really explain everything out in the amount of detail that we’re looking for, but with just a little editing it’ll be perfect. So if you wouldn’t mind adding more to this section and maybe breaking down every trait, then we’d really appreciate it. I love her personality, so I can’t wait to see what you do here! :) I like that she has more of a defense mechanism when being around others, that makes her very sharp with frayed edges because she doesn’t trust anyone. This ties in well with her background, since someone like her wouldn’t want to let just anyone in after what happened with her family, so now she just pushes people away to save herself the trouble of getting hurt again. UGH, BLESS HER HEART!! SOMEONE PROTECT AND LOVE THIS CHILD! XD Also, I’m very glad that you included her intelligence and realistic views, because you do have to be very knowledgeable to be a hacker. Overall, you have really awesome traits, you just need to break down this section a little bit more.

 Moving on to her background section, I really love this! You did an amazing job here with description and detail and really gave us what we were asking for. She has such an interesting and intense background and this would be a good motivator for her to do what she’s currently involved with. Again, BLESS HER HEART, WHY DO THESE TERRIBLE THINGS HAPPEN TO HER!?! XD Poor thing, firstly her mother has an affair and leaves behind Areum and her father, only taking her brother, and then seemingly when her father finds happiness again in his life, his horrible stepwife takes everything away, leaving Areum alone yet again. Honestly, that’s so awful, I can’t help but want to hug this sweet bun!! However, would you mind explaining why she was neglected by her family in the first place and why they thought she was a disgrace? Poor thing, she tries so hard just for all of these terrible people to do this to her… That makes me so mad, I’m glad she’s joining the vigilantes or I would have to go out myself and do something about this step-mom of hers XD

So after the incident with her father being murdered by her stepmother, which Areum is a witness to, her stepmom pays off the judge, jury and even her lawyer to say that it was indeed an accident and the case is closed, leaving her looking like a liar. I honestly love this so much because it plays into Areum’s plotline so well. You really did a great job in this section, seriously. Which leads to her dropping out of school because of the bullying, which is ten out of ten realistic if you ask me lol, which is when she takes on a pc job. However, would you please add why her stepmom killed her father? Is she some kind of black widow? I don’t really think she would kill her father just to get his money, unless she’s really sick and that’s the angle you’re going for, which I can definitely see. Also, why did Areum decide to be a hacker? I know she saw a man getting paid for hacking and decided to try her luck, but was this because she didn’t have anything else to lose so just went for it? I love that you tied in getting revenge for her father’s death as well, that’s perfect! Also, how did she get involved in computer science in the first place? Was it at school? Is this where she learned to hack or is it just something she picked up? I might’ve accidently missed this somewhere. Overall, amazing section, you just need to answer a few little questions for me if you don’t mind. :)

Moving down to her trivia, everything looks great here. You really give us a good view of what is at the center of Areum’s core, the details of which what make her a human being. I also literally screamed when I saw that you included in her hobbies watching CCTV because YES OMG I WAS HOPING SOMEONE WOULD USE THIS XD You’ve seen Lookout, haven’t you? XD That is wonderful, i’m so excited right now lol. Also, I have a question, when did she learn taekwondo? You mention that she’s a “4th degree black belt,” however you don’t really explain how or when she learned this. Her family section also looks good, I don’t see any problems here!

On to her plotline info, everything looks good here too. I love that you included a little background on her plotline and gave more information about how the vigilantes actually found her, as well as her reasoning behind her job. I love this, this is exactly what we were looking for. And again, you’ve watched Lookout right lol, because this app is perf!! XD I LOVE that she still lives in her father’s apartment and stays huddled inside the confines of her torment. This sounds so morbid OH MY GOD XD But no, seriously, I love it! I mean, that is her home, so for her to remain there where she spent her happiest times and also holds the worst memory of all makes perfect sense to me. I feel like this is her way of staying safe and also keeping her father’s memory alive as motivation for being a hacker and plowing towards the goal of revenge.

Her interrogation all looks great, you really stuck to character and brought Areum to life. I even love the ending and how direct and slightly disrespectful she is. This section really helps us to picture Areum and get a better feel for her personality, so great job! I have to say that one of my favorite answers she gives is about opposing the justice system with every inch of her body and instead of fixing it, which it’s too late for, she wants to destroy it. YES GIRL I’M FLIPPING OUT!! XD She’s so freaking cool and badass XD

Last but not least, her love interest section! I honestly wasn’t too surprised to see Hoseok here lol, I don’t know why but I just felt like that’s who you might go for ;D The way you interpreted Hoseok’s background/plotline is fantastic. You have me reaching for the tissues, I swear! XD Anyways, their first meeting is honestly so freaking great. So she’s undercover and trying to hack the system and accidently ends up getting caught by the head of Seoul’s tech department instead XD Oh Areum, the luck you have... XD However, I’m a bit confused on the love story section. So I’m guessing things are out of order here? How did she start developing feelings for him? Was it because they see each other regularly now due to Hoseok’s recent interest in her career? Or what exactly happened there? And how does he feel about her job? Overall though, they are super cute together. I feel like Hoseok would bring out the best in Areum and try to make her open up more. They would be good for each other. :)

Overall, great job creating Areum! I really like her, she has such a different backstory than most, and her personality is on point lol! If you wouldn’t mind editing those few things that we have bolded, then you’ll be accepted for sure! And omg I can’t pick her character theme song either lol, this is so hard! XD Thank you again for applying, we really appreciate it. :)


Ellie's Review: 

Hello, hello there Emmy! Thanks for being our first applicant, and getting it in quickly! Anyways, before I start rambling, let’s get started with my portion of the review :)

Most of your basics look completely fine with me! Aww, she was called Winnie when she was younger? Tbh, don’t tell anyone that I told you this, but my brother is still lowkey obsessed with Winnie the Pooh. BUT ANYWAYS, I like her alias. Black Beauty. It sounds really cool, and it does fit her. Seungyeon is really pretty after all XD Also, same thing that Seol said with her languages, make sure to clear that up :) Her appearance and style all look good to be too! Her style is exactly what I thought the Hacker was going to have!

Onto her personality, I think that the traits that you chose are all fine. Bonus points for adding neutral traits too~ But you seemed to have forgotten that the personality section should’ve had at least 2 paragraphs. I feel like it also needs some more description for us to REALLY REALLY understand exactly who Areum is, and how she acts. You get what I mean? But otherwise, she does seem realistic to me, given her background and all of that. I mean, I can really relate to her traits too, so again, I do like her personality a lot! Anyways, after some editing and adding more details into each of her traits, and it’ll be just fine!

Moving onto her background, I’m giving you a nice solid A for the angst in this! I like how this ties in with her personality! She sorta reminds me of Cinderella, without the step sisters and without a ‘happy’ outcome (until later… hahaha… probably…) She has a really nice background that I can see affected her very much, and lead her to how she is today! BUT, can you explain exactly why her family thought that she was a disgrace? Previously you said that she was very intelligent and did well in school, so I can’t see them having a problem with that. Is it because she did something wrong when she was younger? Or is it just that she was a ‘mistake’ child who wasn’t supposed to be born in the first place? But seriously, her mom though. Like wow, just uprooting yourself ‘cause you just HAD to have an affair with another man. Did her brother seriously do nothing about it? Like, he didn’t try to help Areum at all?

Moving on, I do find it touching that her father ending up getting his sense back, and started giving Areum the love that she deserved. High-five for that Dad! I always love touching moments where you rebuild relationships! I can see it being hard though, since for most of her life, her father wasn’t even there for her--glad that they worked it out XD And her father finds happiness again, and she’s supportive of it… And now hand me the tissues and a baseball bat, since Areum’s dad, why did you have to marry a complete psycho? Don’t give me that cheshire smile evil stepmother, I’m coming out for you! Ahh, this is the entire concept of the story. Don’t worry! We’ll make sure to give Areum that revenge she wants for the court and her step mother. I guarantee it! Anyways, I really like this part since it really plays into Areum’s plotline! Ahh dropping out because of bullying! Darn those bullies. But that in itself is also a very realistic scenario too! Ahh, and then she gets a PC job, and everything starts from there! Anyways, can you go more into detail of why her stepmother killed her father? Because, the stepmother would’ve already had access to his money since they’re married now, right? Can you also go into more detail of why Areum became a hacker? So she just saw a guy hacking a computer, getting money, and just decided to go for it? Anyways, I really liked this section, so good job! You just need to add and fix a few things, and it’ll be all good!

Going onto her trivia, I really liked this section too! It really gave us a good look into who Areum really was, her core you could say :) Aww, poor girl talks to herself. Don’t worry, it’s a natural thing until you meet the right people! Ahh, she always swears a lot too! I sorta want to see her and Yoongi in a contest of that caliber… XD Ahh popping her joints, personally, I think it’s super cool, but I always get paranoid when someone does that near me! Oh, and she still has a pair of headphones that her father gave her? Aww, that’s really sweet! I imagine if anyone ever stole it (*cough cough* Jungkook… *cough cough*) she would be pissed XD. You also mention that she's a 4th Degree Black Belt, can you go more into detail of how she learned, when she learned, and how long it took? I know that it takes around 3 - 5 years to get a 1st degree black belt, thanks to my friends. Ooh, cool motorcycle. I can totally see some of the younger girls and some of the boys wanting to go on a ride with Areum. (Kyungeun would definitely ask to.) Her family section looks good, so no problems there~

 Moving onto her Plotline information, I really like the information you gave. You even added how this vigilante group found her and recruited her! Plus points for that! Ahh, she still lives in the old apartment that she and her father used to live in! Basking in her old memories huh? This makes a lot of sense, and I can really see it being her safe haven. Moving onto her job, I like how she mainly works around love affairs and issues. A nice tie back to her own background. Ooh, so a lot of people know her by her alias. This would make her a wanted criminal by the government if she did a HUGE job. Or maybe she already is? Who knows~

Her interrogation section looks fine to me :) You really brought Areum back to life, and I loved the answer to the last question, and it has to be my favorite answer XD 10/10 material right there! Like yes, you don’t mess with this amazing hacker, or else you’re going to regret it! Very cool and badass--I can already see some of the other more ‘innocent’ plotlines being intimidated by Areum :) Though, I’ll give you this little snippet of