Chapter 1: Yoonhae ?

Chapter 1: it is a nice chapter
please write more

NICE ! (y) loving the cute yet sad and heartbreaking longing. It was cute when he showed up to her like that ! >< But then, I bet he was dead shocked when he saw her crying. ><<br />
Great job ! Keep it up !

Yoona is so cute in here! Nice fic. Great job. ^^

this fanfic is really cute ^^<br />
i especially like the 'this christmas' part

I congratulate both of you for the good teamwork!<br />
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Okay, I may not be the best critic, but as you've requested, I'll try to give my opinion here. The plot is nice, nothing too original, but nobody could ever guarantee originality. In that case, it's actually the flair to the writing that could boost the score up. I think it's fulfilled here. I'm assuming that your friend who wrote this is also 14-15 years old? If so, then I'm impressed, because I think there is a very promising author in the making, and that's great. I admit I have slight...discomfort in the way Yoona's characterized. Only a minuscule part though. I understand that she was frustrated and lonely without Donghae, but her reaction was slightly too...whiny. Note, slightly. I actually enjoy her partial angst portrayal in the beginning, and the happier one in the ending. <br />
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What I have to compliment, again, is your writing style. I think it's where the teamwork between you (sushisoju) and your friend: because like what one of the comment below me said, I also really, really, really adore the "Not too perfect like Siwon. Not too pretty and vainglorious like Heechul. Not too cute like Ryeowook, nor too feminine like Sungmin. Not too mature like Kyuhyun, either. But all of them made her one and only dear Fish, the Fish that she loved so much…" part! Witty and cleverly written! That's where I think the original author is good with the writing style and the translator can also keep it up in the same level. <br />
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So yeah, that would be my comment for the story. Keep up the good work! ^^

This is really adorable one-shot :) Haha. Thank you for sharing and translating the beautiful one-shot :D ♥

Thank you for commenting guys, I appreciate it so much <3. I actually didn't expect anyone to read this :P This is the first time I've ever translated a story into English, plus English is not my native language. So I'm sorry for any mistake I've made. Thank you again for reading this story ^_^

the perfect one-shot to read this holiday! thank you to your friend for writing this wonderful story, and to you for taking the time to translate and share this with all of us Pyros :))