I'll read it till u finish editing chingu.
Because I don't like waiting..hehe..
Actually I'm ok..with some grammatical errors...If u dont mind just unhide it..^^
Chapter 9: Wow, it was nice to see you thought about my suggestions! I definitely think it fits Luhan's "new" personality better without disrupting the same flow. Sunmi's so oblivious to his subtle hints sometimes lol.
Chapter 8: Don't know if this chapter has been edited or just added back in from before, but I think Luhan's little argument with Sunmi about not wanting to kiss and no one wanting to date her etc. seems out of place since he said in one of your other chapters that he wanted to sleep with her. I think if you're still going for erted, bad boy Luhan then maybe you should change the dialogue on the part a bit so it doesn't look like he's not interested at all. Either that or maybe add in his thoughts to show that he's in denial or something... It just seems kind of weird that he would want to chase her but then say all of those things about her being undesirable without further explanation.
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