Title (# 2/5) Personally, i think the title is quite common and should be use in a fanfic.
Originality (# 15/20) This is my first time to read this kind of fanfic maybe? But i think maybe you should add something more that your have never seen it in any fanfic.
Description/Forward (#7/15) I personally think the description part is good and all, but i would prefer if you place the quotes in the foreword section instead and place a corner for the characters. Lastly please refrain from putting very long description for the characters, maybe you should introduce them in the chapters instead because i was feeling very tired to read the characters part.
Grammar (#15 /15) I think your grammar is perfect, there might be some errors and i can't point it out because my grammar is not that well. So you should ask a grammar nazi to check your story.
Characterization (#16/20) You should put the pictures of the characters in the story if you want to shortly introduce them in the foreword/description so people who is confused about EXO member will at least know how they look. Other then that, i think your characterization is great!
Flow (#10/20) I think at the first two chapters or maybe more chapters the flow is great but i think that revealing Dahye as the lost princess is too fast isn't it? And right from the first few chapters i can predict her as the princess, so maybe you should slowly giving out the points of her as the princess.
Enjoyment (# 5/5) I really love this fanfic ^_^ keep the good work up.
( Additional Advice): There is one point i need to point out, i think you should request for a poster in posters shops, or our shop too. Because i think it is too plain or not attractive at all.
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