First Impression

Didn't read the first story... oh well I was just hoping that I would understand the storyline 23/25

 

Title

I liked the title

I was like "Hmmm who's the bad boy?" -- I didn't read the first story

9/10

 

Description and Forword

Liked it Simple but right to the point

10/10

 

Originality

No comment

10/10

 

Word Choices/Vocabulary

Your vocabulary was excellent

There were a few mistakes but nothing that made a huge impactin the story

22/25

 

Content/Plot

I thought the plot was really interesting

I didn't fully understand the guardian adn Unit stuff -- its not your fault

I didn't read the first story to this one

I was also unsure what time period it was under the King stuff throw me off guard -- unless it was explained in the first story then your fine 

23/25

 

Flow

The flow was actually pretty good

There were some parts I was unsure who's POV it was

But there is a few spots to look out for

9/10

 

Characterization

All the characters had their own personality and they all had a purpose

But I was confused with some characters but I cannot take points off of them since I didn't read the first story 14.5/15

 

Presentation

The presentation was excellent!

I just wish I knew who's POV it was in the story

I like how you paragraphed the story

It wasn't to long and too short

9/10

 

Entertainment

I was actually really enjoyed this story

But there were some parts that dragged for me since I could not fully understand it -- my fault not yours

9.5/10

 

Total

139/150

92.6%

 

Reviewer Notes

This fanfic ihas a great plot!!

I feel like it was entirely an original thought!

CLICK HERE  to check the story out!

For author I really enjoyed this story! 

I ended up reading the whole story in one sitting

But don't worry to much about my review!

Since I didn't read the first story!

Maybe if i have the time I will go read the first story to understand this story a little bit more!

~Cutie_Panda~