Anyone want to read my fic (there are currently  two chapters up) and give me more or less a review?

I'd go to a review shop... but I don't want to put in excessive force to find one can't find one that meets the first impression standards... AKA they all have unnecessary characters in their names.

Anyway, it's a science fiction story. Here's the link:

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/343931/

I just want feedback since I'm not going to really get readers, nothing much.

Appreciate it!