Love can lead to sacrifice [ONGOING/EDITING]

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Description

When Luhan starts to put some interest on a girl with who he never talked before, thats when it begins.

Sequel : Sacrifice

Foreword

It's my first fic so I am not very sure about how it will go but I know the beginning, the middle, and the end part so that's the reason of how I know it will be a sequel...

C-Ninja-H :poster thanks!

Sequel : Sacrifice

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queen08 #1 Feb 24, 2017 02:56:19

thanks for reading it and commenting it hehehh, actually its her grand father who is kinda abusive. In another way, in the next chapters something may happen hahahh. And talking about writing style.. yeah, im struggling on putting it on 3rd pov or first pov lately and thankss for the compliment, theses days I keep on trying to do everything at least a little better. :) THANKYU SO MUCH COMMENTNING MY FIRST STORY heheh :) have a nice day too :D

yeolsbubbletea #2 Feb 22, 2017 13:14:31

Chapter 4: Hi, author-nim :) I just read your story. Poor Soomi has an abusive father :( and Luhan here is kind of mysterious (?) which makes him attractive! I wonder, will he act all fluff around Soomi in further chapters? I notice that your writing style in chapter 3 and 4 are much better than your writing in chapter 1 and 2, so that's a good improvement! :D I have one suggestion for you, maybe you have to choose one; the first person POV or the third person POV? I think it'd be good to be consistent because it confused me when you suddenly change the POV from the first person to the third person and then the first person again. Keep writing! I hope you'll have a nice day :)