That One Night

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Hello guys. OMG im kinda scared to write this because I have no idea how it will end up but here is my description.

It was a summer evening on a Monday. It was around 6. Your in L.A. visiting some family and your here for a got7Concert you so excited it was a present from your mom. You were in your hotel room, you had to stay in one because your Family had no more space in their house but hey who cares. You were bored so u went out. There was a park near so you Went and sat on the swings after you started walking again. But this time you bumped into someone and fell… Who is that SOMEONE?

Read and find out. 

Intros long Huh? Well let me know what u think please. ^~^… UNTIL NEXT TIME.

Btw it's my first anything on AFF.

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Nightwing13 #1
Chapter 1: Heaving critique, heads up and don't feel discouraged!

You have quite a few errors in your writing, you should proof read or have a friend read over your work. I'll volunteer myself if you would like to send me your work and i'll peer review it. You have several punctuation errors and you're using text talk. You also have words your capitalizing randomly in the middle of the sentences, not sure why. The story is interesting so far.
princess2394 #2
OMG thank you I've been checking this story like every 5 minutes to see how it's going or if someone commented like my nerves were everywhere u have given me lots of confidence that you for ur sub too :)
wangwang24 #3
Chapter 1: Thats cool awww i love it writing it to end it's cute :3
princess2394 #4
Hey guys please comment what you think. Jebal!!!!!!
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