Chapter 1: Hello there, fellow writer! I personally like this piece though it may be more on description and not too much of an extended plot. Dealing with the issues of the heart is never easy, and more often than not, people tend to fall back on past instances (for example, Jennie going back for Hanbin despite getting ruined emotionally and such). Bobby's situation in this story is sad, yet considerably real.
I think you wrote pretty well, so I don't think there's anything else to say but good job! Your choice of making dialogues bold to distinguish them from the rest of the passages is quite neat. Have a nice day, (:
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