Chapter 4: Update >.<

Chapter 3: Update soon!!

Chapter 1: .................................

Chapter 1: erm... it's kinda messy... Btw, 'Kaja' means let's go not come .

And please remember to use enough space between lines because it's utterly confusing.

Just gonna drop some advice here ._. I completely agree with @zoetan96<br />
Plus you should use 'you' instead of 'u' and 'two' or 'too' instead of '2' when writing because this is a fanfic, not a text message, it'll actually makes you look like a lazy author. And in fanfictions you don't use brackets and make it look like a dialogue and go '[sleeps]' or anything, you should use 'she went to sleep' or something to make it look and sound better(if the action is between a sentence then don't use 'huh(with cynical smile)', but use:<br />
"Huh?" He smiles cynically.<br />
Plus make sure you aren't getting tangled between the past tenses and present tenses.<br />
Sorry but there are a sort of a lot of grammar mistakes and spelling mistakes, it's kind of hard to read for a few people, no offense >< And no need to add the meaning of a korean word (such as 'Kaja(come)'), you can choose to explain all the words at the end of the chapter in an author note to make it look neater.

i have no idea what was going on in the first chapter.the plot is nice,but seriously.i couldnt read it.

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@trollerrr<br />
kudos x1000 to you.

thanks..i'm not power in english..and still new..so thanks..