Story: After Earth
Author: heart_and_seoul
Status: Chapters 1-12 (on-going)
Characters: OC, Park Chanyeol
Rated?: No
Foreword: 

On The Run

Adrenaline coursing through her veins, Yuna pumped her long legs as she swished away the outstretching leaves of several trees. As vigorously as Yuna attempted to run, she could hear the panting wild breaths of the Sa'ans hot on her heels. Her lungs pumped as hard as they could, but Yuna's legs gave out beneath her and she collapsed onto the damp squelchy forest floor, gasping for air.  

Story/Title: The title is commonly used, so it's not that cliche to me, tbh, but it suits well with your story.

Foreword: Yes, the foreword was captivating. The words you used to describe the world is fascinating, I imagine a scene inside my head. Though, it's usually more captivating when the foreword is a little bit shorter, so the reader can just get right to the story.

Plot: I liked the plot, it really builds up the personalities of the characters, but it was a little confusing. Sometimes it's hard to tell who's thought it is.

Character Development: I felt like the characters took this challenge and grew to become a better, stronger person. All the challenges they had to face was amazing.

Grammar: I couldn't catch any spelling mistakes.

Originality: This story was similar to a story I wrote for school, but I have to say - it wasn't as long as this story. This story is more on the action side, while mine was more on the sorrow/romance side. Even though there is a slight romance in your story, I feel like you balanced out action and romance out well enough for the plot to work.

Personal Enjoyment: Well, the story did make me scream a little. To be honest, I felt no emotion. That's what happens when I read. When I read, I have no emotions, except reading sorrow. I don't know why. I just have to say, it's nice to be able to scream during this story. It was fun.

Overall: I think you did well on the story. I liked how they always had to venture out and stuff. If I were to give you a score.... 92/100