Story: My Personal Tease
Author: jeje_bts and marmalody
Status: Chapters 1-7 (on-going)
Characters: Jimin, K (OC), Jin, Taehyung
Rated?: Yes
Foreword: 
What bachelorette party doesn't include a night to a strip club? K, being a shy and a reserved young woman, was adamant about avoiding one. Fortunately her friends convinced her otherwise. After all, what kind of a friend ditches her best friend's special night? Her friends happily chose the man to give her, her first ever and  that also turned her world upside down. Was it luck or did fate play a role in their unexpected encounter? 

Title – My Personal Tease. Well, frankly speaking, I can say that the title has this cliché kind of sorta vibe on it. Since I’ve encountered a number of and a stories already, the title simply gives me an idea of how will the story goes; although that doesn’t mean that using it as a title is a bad thing, nope. It’s fine, however.

Foreword – The foreword is good to go, actually. Nonetheless the constant use of questions as a part of the introduction is not necessarily advised; authors can come up with various alterations since the presented preface can be a little bit confusing as well. 

Take a look at this sequence- the foreword presented goes like this: QUESTION > SENTENCE > QUESTION > SENTENCE > QUESTION

Do keep in mind that whenever you work on a certain paragraph and you’ve decided to put up a question or two, make sure that you’ll be answering them on the SAME paragraph. The idea of letting the readers have this ‘cliffhanger’ feels is a good thing, yes. But writing questions that indirectly answers themselves is not entirely a fine move. Like I said, it gave me, the readers a possible outlook for as to how the story will go.

Plot – MAJOR PLOT TWIST HOLY FRICK FRACK. I’m creying. The statement I’ve made with regards to the title and the foreword are to some extent true now. Partially, yes. I didn’t see the plot twist coming. It really is a good one. The scenes have been carried out very well—from the happenings in the club to the school. Everything’s written neatly. I thought I’ll be losing my interest sooner but upon reading the part wherein mister stripper is also her dance teacher, I seriously went ape. How creative and original can the author get? Kudos! I suggest you really do some minor modifications on the foreword to attract a lot more readers because this story is precious, not even gonna lie. This story is worth reading. I’m not a hardcore BTS fan but I guess, I’ll be checking them out a lot more now, thanks to this story. Ah and lastly, I smell romance. ROMANCE EVERYWHERE. It’s rare for a story to have a corresponding romantic side on it. It’s usually here, there. But then again, this story gave justice to its romance tag. /clapping so hard rn bc the author is wowza; u n u ♡

Character Development – All in all, the character development has been presented carefully. Despite the fact that I really liked the idea of Jimin being a stripper and K’s dance teacher— his personality can be a little bit of a puzzling lad’s but that’s actually a good thing. It goes very well with the title. My Personal Tease.

Grammar – Very good grammar and spellings and all that jazz. Though there are some slight slip-ups. Everything is based on K’s POV but sometimes, instead of ‘me’, ‘her’ is being used plus verbs in their past tense forms are being used even when they’re not supposed to. 

Originality – Very unique—based on my experiences of reading and a stories, this is the first that I’ve encountered a striper slash teacher character (Note though that this statement is clearly based on my own opinion only). Very, very nice combination. 

Personal Enjoyment – I loved it! I usually turn my laptop off (this is legit, tbh) upon reading the first two chapters of a certain /a story just because it is downright cliché. But this one kinda sort of made me crey because it’s very innovative and creative. I also like how the author was able to furnish everything thoroughly in a first person type of writing. People usually write in third thus reading someone’s work that is made using first person such a refreshing sight to see. This is a very good story. You better update soon because you just earned yourself another reader. Lotsa love! ♡

© Rightful credits basically goes to the shop and to the assigned reviewer ¦ -kaisoo ¦ 2014