Story: Someone Call Dr. Nam!
Author: Snowflake21
Status: Completed - 3 Chapters
Characters: You - Woohyun - Myungsoo
Rated?: YES
Summary: 
Wouldn't we all like to be 'treated' by Dr. Nam Woohyun?
Right? Right.
Thought so.
 

Title:

The title is good. It would totally attract infinite fans but as a downfall, it would definitely push the non-fans away. Though, I wouldn't advise you to remove 'Nam' because if you do, it would sound like EXO's song. All in all it's not such a bad idea.

Foreword:

There's nothing really erroneous in your Foreword, it is fine as it is however; another placement would give it better appeal. It's an excellent foreword but it's not as compelling as it could have been. Put some little hints for the upcoming hot chapters because the history of how ‘you’ got the job is not really relevant to the story itself.

Confusing: You got a job straight away a few months after you graduated from the Seoul National University...

            'Straight away' is not really synonyms with 'a few months after'. See the contradicting idea there?

Suggestion: 4 years ago, you got a job right after you graduated from Seoul National University. The hospital was very pleased of the internship you've had with them before. Also, seeing that you were one of the top students of your school, they got no reason to reject you.

Suggestion: I know you want to create an effect but I suggest you remove the '*sigh*'. Although, it's not really vital.

Continuing, I have to divulge that Woohyun's gif in your foreword is phew! y. Just a proposal, you can request for an actual poster in graphic shops. Trust me, graphics and layouts add to the attraction to draw readers.

Plot:

The story is pwp so plot is not much considered. Oh the doctor/nurse kink here is flawlessly exhibited. The way you write is absolutely terrific I must admit. In my outlook, scenes can only be either awful or outstanding; nothing in between and you are really excellent at it. Although there weren’t much of twists, I’d say the story is wisely executed all in all.

Character Development:

Again, since the story was pwp, character development isn’t necessary. I liked how it was implied that Woohyun is a soft and gentle person and then act like a beast in bed. Haha. Anyways, I adore Dr. Nam’s teasing.

Grammar:

Your grammar is excellent but you have a lot room for improvements not in grammar but in sentence construction. You overuse commas. You can breakdown your sentence into a shorter for more impact. If the sentence is too long, it loses its charm.

The paragraphs are too long too. Try to break it down into 7-8 sentences per paragraph. 10 at maximum. Don’t make it too long because it might get confusing to read.

In the first chapter, you used the word ‘womanhood’ to imply a woman’s area but let me tell you, it doesn’t mean that way. Womanhood is a state of being a woman and it’s not something someone could . It sounded awkward too. Honestly, it made me cringe. Otherwise, the whole story is applauding.

Originality:

I’ve read a few Doctor/Nurse stories but it’s not that common compared to other kinks so the idea is still considered fresh.

Personal Enjoyment:

Goddammit! I was sweating so hard while I was reading it. A clap for you because even though it was a story, it made me laugh (in a good way) at the right moments. There isn’t much to say but I certainly enjoyed your writing. That's it! Thank you!