For the majority of people, a lucky charm may be an old coin, a rabbit's paw, or a horseshoe; but for Park Chanyeol it must be something else... something worth of keeping a halo of mystery around it.
Chapter 1: Title and Foreword Page (4/5)
I had to read the description twice to make sure I got it. And after I read the story, I thought it would make more sense if you had said, 'But for Park Chanyeol, it must be something else . . . ' Because Jisoo didn't know she was his charm, right?
Plot (40/50)
This was a short one, and there's nothing wrong with that, but it was so very cliché. I knew how it was going to end by the end of the second paragraph.
Flow and Execution (15/20)
It was relatively easy to follow. You did a great job describing the basketball game. Phrases like, 'watching the ball rotate in the air' was really well written.
Spelling and Grammar (19/20)
I saw a few wrong words here and there. Nothing major.
Appearance (5/5)
Everything was uniform. No complaints.
Chapter 1: That was awesome and very well-written! I like the humor and overall cuteness of the story! Good luck on the contest, I wish you all the best :)
Chapter 1: Omo, that was so cute:3 I started giggling so much at the last sentence:3
Please, tell me when you're going to write more one-shots or stories^^
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