Retrograde

Description

If you think you don't belong, you may be right...

Foreword

"We live on a placid island of ignorance in the midst of black seas of infinity, and it was not meant that we should voyage far."

-H.P. Lovecraft, The Call of Cthulu and other Weird Stories

 

 

Written for Round 2 of Shiny_A Plus's Writing Down the Bones contest. Inspired by this beauty here:

 

notice: this fic isn't mine. it was given to me by Shawol360 when she deactivated.

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Shiny_A_plus #1
I know it's not your story, but I finally got around to posting my review if you are interested in taking a look~ :)

http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/602008/14
Shiny_A_plus #2
I'll be reading this soon... did Shawol360 deactivate her account?
daebakdeerlove #3
Chapter 2: Yay! OMG I love this! Hehe :3 The plot is so good and satisfying, as well as sad, and it's only 2 chapters. I like how you took on the Little Mermaid idea and feel, and even mentioned it once in the first chapter. So Taemin is a siren, huh? That's awesome. Great job on the re-writing. <3 And yet again I will say I love the details and the way you describe things. :))
daebakdeerlove #4
Chapter 1: OMG this I seriously so good TToTT Now most of my questions are answered , haha! ^o^ I love this concept and like I've said before, your descriptive writing is simply amazing. I'm jelly lol
daebakdeerlove #5
Chapter 1: Wow, I love your descriptive writing and the grammar and punctuation. Haha, it's soo hard to find a good story with all three. It was also very interesting and somewhat reminded me of The Siren's Cry. This was a good oneshot, but it feels like it's missing quite a bit, and I have a lot of questions: Where did Jinki go after taking the woman's hand? Why did he leave Taemin in the first place? Why can't they see each other anymore? Where does the story take place?
liliac #6
Chapter 1: I always feel like I've left another world whenever I finish reading one of your stories... This was short but I was immediately intrigued into finding out who (or what) was Jinki... It's so hard to leave behind things that are dear to you but it's even harder being somewhere you don't belong... I feel like I'd need more backstory to really understand Jinki's decision though, because I feel like leaving people he loved and losing his voice in trade for a life on land seems unfair... unless there's a reason... I know what you wrote at the end should be the reason, but I can't imagine someone doing something that drastic, chasing some ideals... Or maybe that's just me...

You write so... so poetically, that I just feel so light and fluttery after reading...
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