Vision

Description

...a gas stove.

 

Hissing fills the air, but no flames rise when he tests the first burner.

 

Sehun turns all four knobs.

Foreword

Contest entry for Karma's Second Writing Contest. I used the first prompt which is a flash fiction by Fred Leebron called Water. Enjoy! ^.^ 
 
She touches his hair by the river. I am in our apartment, working. Her hand moves down his back. I empty the trash and unclog the kitchen sink. His former girlfriends have turned into lesbians. I take the key to his apartment, which he gave me so I could water his plants during the summer. He bends his kissing face to hers. I walk over to his apartment, just two blocks away. Their legs dangle in the river. I unlock the door and bolt it behind me. The room smells of feet and stale ashtrays. In the kitchen is a gas stove. I turn it on without lighting it. Down by the river is a flock of geese, which they admire while holding hands. Soon he will take her back to his apartment. Soon they will lie there, readying cigarettes. I relock the apartment and slip into the street. The air smells of autumn, burnt. In the sky, birds are leading each other south. I know there is nothing left between us, that she looks at me each morning as if I were interrupting her life.

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Fan_of_Karma
#1
Chapter 1: Nice twist to the original story! And I did not expect anyone to take that lesbian comment literally xD I like your interpretation of the story and how you decided to end it. Your grammar is pretty good, with the exception of comma usage. I think that if you improve on those, this story would be a killer! Karma~
SsulxExo
#2
Chapter 1: Jongin and jinri will die right?