Panko-Chan

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  Tittle - 10/10

Panko-Chan, eh? Is that a Japanese name? Actually, it's very interesting and the point here is what would people feel if they came across your title. Its too cute and the fact that it related to your story is really great! Panko-Chan, the keychain which she made a necklace.

Foreword - 9/10

I like the formulation of your description actually. In a form of a poem. But I could have love it if it has a syllable count. But, anyways, thumbs up for it! And my favorite line is that, Or just by eating,  the famous chips, "Lays".

Plot -  14/15

Very weird and unique. I never really seen such a story that talk about the past and the future not the current time. But a car accident is a little too overused or something along that line, so minus points for that.

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KennyV #1
Chapter 1: ► story title LABYRINTH FOR LIARS
► story link http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/894779/labyrinth-for-liars-drama-romance-exo-sehun-baekhyun-kyungsoo-zitao
► genre MYSTERY, ROMANCE, DRAMA,
► # of chapters 1 BUT PLANNING TO UPDATE MORE SO YOU CAN REVIEW MORE
► reviewer ANY AVAILABLE
► password MUZIK
Rednovamber #2
Chapter 2: ► Story title: Seasons of mixed emotions
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► genre: psychological, romance, drama, slice of life, slightly rated M.
► # of Chapters: 2 until now, but it is on-going.
► Reviewer: any available
► Password: Whatcha doin' today?

Take your time!~~
bts_kimtaehyung #3
Chapter 1: ► story title: Blind Heir
► story link:https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/750795/blind-heirs-angst-romance-tragedy-you-exo-baekhyun-kimwoobin
► genre: angst, romance
► # of chapters: 3
► reviewer: any available
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gonexx #4
Chapter 1: ► story title : Eyes, nose, lips
► story link : http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/768207/
► genre : songfic, angst
► # of chapters : one
► reviewer : frozenlikeice
► password : Hot issue~
doubleabs #5
Chapter 1: ► story title- The Game of the Maze
► story link- www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/741049/
► genre- action, romance, fantasy
► # of chapters- so far, 4
► reviewer- whoever wants to i guess~
► password- Volume up<333

Thanks!! :D
mysoulisstarving #6
Chapter 1: ► story title:Silver Aura
► story link:http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/696194/silver-aura-fantasy-leo-hyuk-vixx-ravi-ken-vixxandoc
► genre:Romance,Fantasy
► # of chapters:6
► reviewer:frozenlikeice
► password: Volume up

thank you~~
jeonwonussi #7
Chapter 28: Oh, it's alright! I wasn't really in a rush. Thank you for sparing some time to review even if you're on vacation. :)
teehee. i'll try organizing my foreword again. i've been planning to do that for so long already but i'm just too lazy. lol
well, a shop did the poster for me and i liked how it turned out, to be honest. hehe. yeah, i have a lot of trouble with punctuations and such so i'll try working on it! i don't really use any font when i paste it on the body though. O.O but i'll check it out.

haha. i haven't really checked the stories with similar titles as mine but i'm glad that we have different plots.

Thank you so so much for the review! Good luck to you and the shop! :D
JESLEN #8
Chapter 27: oh my. thank you so much for this very insightful review. i cant believe i am really reading a review of my story. ill try to incorporate all of your suggestions, thanks a lot. well i actually thought of putting it on wattpad. maybe when ill be done with the story ^_^ haha thanks so much for the compliments. i am grinning like a fool and oh thanks for answering the poll too. lets see if you got it right on the next chapters. i really cant thank u enough dear. thanks for reviewing this again. and im sorry for my seemingly bashing attitude. im so embarassed. and if ur planning to read my other stories, i got to warn u that they are really cliche haha. ill credit you as soon as i get my PC dear. thanks and god bless! >_<
thebaroness #9
Chapter 1: ► story title : Ludos
► story link : https://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/659609/ludos-highschool-exo-kai-kris-teenlove
► genre : romance, fluff , high school
► # of chapters : 40
► reviewer : frozenlikeice
► password : hot issue


Thank you so much n have a good day!
JESLEN #10
Chapter 23: The graphic artist uses symbolism whenever she makes a graphic, that is why I had chosen her. In my case, she incorporates lanterns to symbolize light and hope despite the darkness that the characters are experiencing.The two women have the same face in the poster but one could tell that they are different, which is one of the main points of the poster: to show the difference despite having the same face.

I cannot think of other titles that go along with the story without revealing too much. Do you have some suggestion?

What do you mean by your statement that the characterization is good but not the best? Are the characters static or dynamic? Do I need to characterize them more? I often use indirect characterization. Do you think the characterization need more work?

I know that arranged marriages are common in AFF but it's not actually the main point of the story.They are not even married. The arrange marriage is only one of the plots that I made. I know too that amnesia is common. But I incorporate it from the very beginning in order for the readers to relate to her: to know the mystery behind who she was as the story progresses. This way, the readers and Chae Won have the same pattern in discovering her identity.

And I actually have issues on my grammar. I usually incorporate different tenses on my paragraphs.

So, the story was not reviewed by frozenlikeice but rather cuteismysterious? And btw, the score should be 86 not 66. Thanks.
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