Chapter 1: Hahahahaha xD Jackson xD aw shy mark pfft 'well that escalated quickly' haha funny xD nice job Author-nim

Chapter 1: Hahahahahahaahahhahahah oh my gosh you got the right flow girl! ;) it's good but yeah I don't think Jackson address Mark as hyung since yeah they're speaking english and well
But honestly this is cute!!!!! Gosh hahahaha idk how to react sbvsjaajak good job hehe :3

Chapter 1: omergerd! this was sooooo kyooooote!!! ughhhhh

Chapter 1: i really wouldn't be surprised if they do come across a fanfic one day about them LOL

Chapter 1: XD i like it!~ cute story hehe

Chapter 1: Lol..so cute..i love the ending^^

Chapter 1: Omg the end is the best xD

Chapter 1: D'awww they're so cute! Just little things to watch out for: You have a few grammatical errors sprinkled throughout your writing. A recurrent one is using felt instead of feel (could felt vs could feel).

I understand this isn't your fandom so I won't go too much into the characterization. I will say there's a lot of screaming that you've written in, and I've never really liked to use scream as a verb for speaking. Shouting or yelling is better IMO, especially when talking about guys lol.

This is definitely a very cute story, quite well written. I do love Jark... but there's so many possible pairings in Got7 that I can't just pick one >_<

Great job, keep writing~