Chapter 1: The picture you showed here is the young dongwoo ^^ thats not hoya ^^
Anyway good story :))

Chapter 1: The story was kind of interesting, but I would have preferred that you described certain things instead of just putting photos up. Also, you write in a typical story format, but then when he gets to the dialogue you switch to a script format? It's strange. The way you wrote the story was unique, but it wasn't very enjoyable for me. Do your best to focus on writing sentences properly and watch your grammar, because some of the things you wrote didn't make sense because there were errors. Otherwise, you tried something different, but the story felt very scattered because you switched media and writing formats too much. Try writing a story without the use of pictures and put dialogue mixed in with the paragraphs you write using proper grammar and quotations. Otherwise, the story was interesting! Please do your best to keep writing, and don't use short cuts when unless an image is extremely vital to the story. Good luck!

Chapter 2: i love your fanfic author-nim