Hello, here's your goody bag for joining my TMaF semi-contest! Thank you!

Plot: I love and I think I will always be drawn to this kind of concept: possessive love which, at the same time never feels more "genuine". I think your plot is impactful and the message is clear –though relatively not "morally-acceptable". On one part, there is not much plot development as this is the type of story that relies heavily on concept –and thankfully, your concept is very strong to make up for the lack of actual plot development. Of course, arguably, Yoona's "introspecting" scene may also be considered as a plot development, and if that's the case, I actually am glad that you include it, not only that it would make it somewhat more absurdly romantic, but also because it adds the angle to the minimalistic plot (again, minimalistic here is not a bad thing. You are supported by a strong concept anyway).

A point of consideration that I can make is the reasons and motives behind Yoona's actions. I understand that Yoona is depicted as this person whose motives may not be questioned. I personally think however, for the sake of coherency and completeness of the plot, it would not hurt to add two or three lines or a brief paragraph underlying her reason for doing so. If it's not appropriate to be included in the first scene of the story (which is Donghae-focused), I think it would be more suitable in Yoona's self-reflecting scene, because again, while the concept is very strong, there are possibilities of holes in it.

Characters: I like the way you portray Donghae. There is this sense of contradictive obsession and selflessness that establishes him as a character. And I'm enthralled by it. It's also wonderful how, given the relatively short entry, you are able to portray the complexity of his character.

Then, there is Yoona –a questionable and confusing character who deserves pity more than hatred, in my opinion. I actually think the way she acts so indifferent when she's doing those things to Donghae was good –and the effect was doubled when she actually shattered after she did that to Donghae and had her mental battle with herself. The point where she caressed Donghae's hand to her cheek was also a good point in showing her character and her simply maniacal (yet again, pitiful and quite bitter) self.

The characters are solid and impactful. And considering the difficulty level of this kind of characterization, I'd say good job!

Style: I'd say, your style is impactful. The words used are simplistic, but again, maybe because it is backed with a strong concept, you can't help but to feel that the simplistic words and elaborations (which are actually, not plenty in this fic) are simply fitting. In fact, I think it is a right approach. The word choice is also magnificent, because it manages to portray the obsession and the turmoil perfectly. It's like you bewitched the readers and we all have the mutual consensus that these are things that are not meant to be spoken and do not need to be elaborated, but we all know. Technically speaking, it's not "sufficient" in terms of there should have been more, but since the message gets translated better this way (and I do think writing relates more to feelings rather than technicalities), I do not complain.

Another note is that while it's good to keep everything simplistic, I think Yoona's emotional struggle could have been drafted more emotionally at the end of the chapter. It's the part where it'd be the best to show how mentally broken Yoona is. The way it is now is good, but it could have been written a bit more dramatically/contemplatively.

Suggestion:
• Since I read your prequel "Normal" as well (but I do not include it in the assessment of the story), I do think that some traits/backgrounds/thoughts of Donghae could have been included in the "Weird" series. I'm not saying all parts of "Normal" should be included or that "Normal" should constitute as the first chapter of "Weird", I'm just saying that elements may have been included: for example, Donghae's affection to her hair or the ribbon, and how this can be related to the "Weird" series, more parts of Donghae's 'rational' self in "Normal" (which could subsequently be followed/ negated by his 'possessed' self in "Weird")... You know, just more elements to support the story.
• Insert more emotion (even when it is contradiction) of Yoona in the last part.

Favorite Parts:
• Can I say that I actually love your writing style more in "Normal"? I love Donghae's contemplation there.
• The concept of course. This is an inherent bonus, because it actually effortlessly supports all your other elements of the story: plot, character, style.
• Your impactful writing style. I cannot explain it, but the message just gets crossed to me.
 

Chapter 1: that was so intense and descriptive <3 but they both died in the end TT.TT loved this story though ^^

Chapter 1: Awwnn.. How pathetic. Author-nim, your idea and story was a perfect oneshot. I really enjoyed it.. :D Hope you can win the contest. Well, I also gave my story a shot, but I don't think it will work. Anyway, WHAITING!! ^^

Chapter 1: Poor Hae, Poor Yoong.everyone lost it

Chapter 1: Honestly this story has lots of meaning to it I really like it