Chapter 2: PLEASE READ, I WANT YOU TO UNDERSTAND QHAT YOUR DOING RIGHT AND WRONG
Feedback: your making the chapters short. It feels like the 1st day already ended and it sounds like it won't be an interesting story. The title is a awesome choice but the chapters and the format that you write in, it doesn't interest people.
Star: I loved how you said in the beginning she only had ten days with him. And how would you spend it with the one you love. It sounds interesting and makes the readers think deeper in the story and use there thinking and imagination.
This is only my point of view. If you use the feedback or not, it's your decision. I'm just pointing out what interests me and what you should improve on to make other people interested in your story.
You should also edit your forward so you have a characters list or cast. It's only my point of view, again.
Use the information if you want. If you don't its perfectly fine to me, again.
I'm not bossing you around or anything.