Days and Nights

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My first fanfic! Yes, this is my first time and I'm going to make it short. just few chapters perhaps. Since I'm a beginner in this kind of thing, I really need critic :|

I'm not into thingy actually, but suddenly I want to write this. 

Kaisoo isn't my favorite otp actually, but they're adorable to the max :3 I'll put some KrisLu inside :3 

This is a story of a man and his lover, their friends, and their secrets. 

Foreword

Kyungsoo stared at Kai through the class’ window, Kai stared back, and both smiled. 

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deeragon93 #1
Chapter 6: Geez, the plot is great but this story really lack of proof-read that a lot of grammatical errors could be found in this fic..
Besides, you didn't separate the past and the present storyline so I found the whole chapters confusing
You need an editor babe ^^
fancyfountain #2
Chapter 6: what the heck did i just read...
fancyfountain #3
Chapter 3: wow so kris is married, not to lulu :( is his wife dead? no? :((
i remember ever reading a story like this. kris gave the relationship up even though he knew he's fallen in love too deep with baek (yes, it's krisbaek, haha)
is luhan still in love with kris tho? (because baek managed to move on though it's obvious that he's so reluctant to do so while kris drowning in his misery but finds a little joy in his new family nonetheless ohohoo okay that's unrelated) and does kris still love lulu? it doesn't seem kris is, but lulu sounds bitter about it. :3
i also read kyumin that has this kinda story too. the result is the same though in this one, sungmin never moves on (nor kyu but he won't divorce his wife ofc). *cries*
stupid stupid stupiiiid~ why do y'all have to live such a sad life~ can you all just love and hug and kiss and everything will be okay. trust me. ;~;
i hope kaisoo won't go through such sad things. no no nooo~ >_<
kaisoo have to be forever lovey dovey~ xD
And, WHY EVERYONE LOVES THE THOUGHT OF SUICIDE SO MUCH? SUICIDE IS A NO NO, BBs. T_T
fancyfountain #4
Chapter 2: Are you sure Junmen like girls? :3
AND WHY WOULD KAI COMMIT SUICIDE?! No, bb. Come to me. I'll make you feel better with a thousand poodles. *coos*
and ARE YOU HINTING THAT KRISHAN EVER BROKE UP? WHY?! THEY'RE SO PERFECT FOR EACH OTHER *sobs*
fancyfountain #5
Chapter 1: no way is this tragedy noooo.
if you make one of them die, i swear,

don't let any of them die pleaaaase *uglysobs*
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