Overview of Part 1

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Tillynilly and I decided it would be beneficial for both us and you if I did an overview of each 'Part'.  That said, these will chapters posted after each Part is finished, and will be pretty much a little summary or little things that I want to talk about.  (I stole idea this from Erischaotica but I've seen lots of other authors do too).

Sorry this isn't a chapter, but Part 2 is underway and the first draft has been written, although it's incomplete.  I was also annoyed that part 1 happened to end at 9 chapters, so this makes an even 10.

Part 1:

Starting date: May 11, 2013 (I didn't know this for sure, so I'll just use the day I posted...)
Ending date: November 4, 2013
Words: 54225

 

Things planned from the beginning:

That depends on what 'the beginning' pertains to, as Deobli isn't the first story I wrote for this plot line.   The first story I ever wrote when I had this idea was November of 2012, where Sungjong was an OC, Myungsoo was Taemin, Dongwoo was Kai, and everyone else was an OC.  God, it's embarrassing even thinking about it.  It was called, The Standing, the Falling, the Fallen, I'm pretty sure, and at the time, I was convinced it was the best I ever wrote.  Nope nope nope.

 

Anyway, the bleacher scene, I had from the beginning, and also the running into the wire thing.  I knew Sungjong was going to meet up with Myungsoo and Sungyeol sometime, and that all his friends but one were going to die.  There are also some scenes in Part 2 and on that I thought up last year, but of course I can't elaborate on them right now.  Oh, and I also knew there was going to be a male character who was rather classy and mysterious, someone who overlooked the game.  I also planned the group would move from house to house in the game.  

 

I knew I wanted the game to start in the gym with bleachers, and I knew I wanted Sungjong to have a good friend who matched and contradicted his personality. 

 

Basically I had a bunch  little scenes and ideas planned out and just needed a story to wrap them all together.


Things I bullted:

The entire 'dark space' thing I thought of on the run.  You probably already figured out what that was all about, but I'm still not saying anything until Part 2 comes out.  Um, I also made up the characters' personalities on the go.  I never really stopped to plan them.  Soju, Sungjong's dog, and that whole story I came up with.     Here's a list of things I came up with (probably at 1 in the morning as I complained to either of my 2 coauthors):  -the kid blowing his head up in the gym bleachers -the names Derium and Sound -basically every single action scene, from the first kid in the parking lot, to the massacre where they got ambushed -Kai's death -you know what, everyone's death -how
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_forgemini
#1
Chapter 4: Been a while but coming back to this and reading the second chapter... I'm torn between enjoying watching all these characters grow up and that eerie, foreboding tone sitting on top of everything they do. I love how you've incorporated the the internet, and how it sort of gives me mid to early 2000s vibes with AOL and AIM messaging and following people on myspace; I love how its shown to drive such a positive force in Sungjong's life and that line of "Sungjong built himself a family three-thousand miles away" because it's so incredibly true of children who grew up/grow up in an age of the internet.

Again those italics don't entirely fit. "Sulli was the first to die" jesus! I'm so interested to find out what this all means, where those lines are coming from. Are they thoughts? premonitions from an omniscient narrator?

But that last part. In simple words...wtf. "None of what is real?" indeed. I'm intrigued.
_forgemini
#2
Chapter 2: I might be getting in over my head as this story hasn't been updated in years, but this introduction is so good! I love how it begins, how even Sungjong's birth gives this sort of feeling of eeriness. This sort of chronology of their lives is an interesting take and, though it feels as if the story is taking place in our present day, this story feels almost a bit apocalyptic...sort of dystopian. It's only the first chapter, and Sungjong and his friends are still only kids, and yet that heavy atmosphere is suffocating, lingering. But it doesn't feel overwrought. Yes, the death of Soju is devastating (especially to a child who feels responsible for the death) but there is an undercurrent of something more sinister.

The italicized text, the narrative that those bring, feels disjointed from the rest of the chapter, and it gives a feeling of unease. Those don't really belong in a chapter talking about a child and the death of his dog. I'll be interested to see if, as I read, if there is more meaning behind them.
annawhimsy
#3
'ello, my fish.
I have nominated you for Best Action in the World of Literature fanfiction awards.
May the odds be ever in your favor (oh gaud did i just quote that book let me go purge myself of the mainstream by claiming that i read it before it got popular which is true cos i did read it a few years before but anyway that's besides the point i'm rambling and beginning to sound quite stupid so erhm yeah anna out and gluck).
iMerawr
#4
OKAY I JUST NOTICED MYUNGSOO AND SUNGJONG'S IN HERE OKAY XD <3
iMerawr
#5
Haii :)
Im from the World of Literature Review Shop.
I'll be your reviewer instead.
I'm sorry if you didn't get your preferred one.
So Anyways.
I'll be reading and commenting at some random point :)
I apologize for the delay and Yeah,
I'll PM you my progress.
Tata~
LittleSushi
#6
Chapter 22: Oh, I used to be suscribed to this, don't know why I unsuscribed..? Maybe because I changed accounts... I'll read this again, I didn't remember how awesome this was OTL.
Wushupandabear #7
Chapter 4: This is so intersesting. I love it!!!!