Forever

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If nothing ever lasts forever, then what is forever?

 

 

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Have you ever wondered how much you love someone?
Can you give everything for this person?
For one heart?
One weak heart.
To loved you back?
When you spend all your time, every breath, every whisper, and every smile with one
marvelous person?
What if that person moves away from you...

More and more..
Has someone.
Heart is taken.
Helpless, what would you do?

Will you fight?
What if you fail?
You try?
And if it doesn't make sense?
You say that love makes sense.

And what if that person don't reciprocate your love?
It is unknown..

Sad, isn't it?

 

 

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Foreword

You know how it hurts?
Do you realize how much I like you?
No.
Back.
Do you realize how much I love you?

What about the fact that I can have a lot of girls.
What about the fact that I can bring them home.
But no.
No one can replace you.
They are all the same.

 
Trying to forget about you, don't think, but I can't.
I can not.
It's impossible.

Why?
Why are you doing this?
You don't notice me.
You notice her.
The girl that I hate so much.
Or not.
If I hate her, you'd hate me too, right?
I wouldn't want to.

I know you from the beginning.
I know your every detail.
You also mine.
But this is insufficient.

I want you to be with me, forever.
That's all.
Is that too much?

I fell in love. Without reciprocation.
It's my fault.
 
 
 
 
My name is Xi Luhan.
 
 
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And this is my story....

My reality

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kaiohtic
#1
Chapter 1: first of all.. don't use my real name out there it's embarrassing orz what will i do when my friends find out just pls shorten it to thanh lol. or chrome, since that's my online nickname

secondly, you're a little confused it seems or maybe your autocorrect it stupid bc you obviously meant that you love me xP

thirdly, i will show you it's lukai in my next fic!! :P

and about the story...
well, since English is not your first language it's difficult of course, but you will improve over time. hust don't give up! Since I'm a grammar nazi i will nag much, so I won't say much about language and expression
i admit there are some really nice scenes there, some expressions i like and i hate myself for the lack of imagination i have. I can't really describe things in details and with pictures and symbols like you *cries*
overall, the plot is nice and solid, a luttle cliché i thought at first but WTF did you do?!? plottwist?!?! i haaaaaaaaaate you!! didn't you say kailu?!? orz.
gimme part 2. now. i'm gonna punish kai if you don't give me a happy ending!! *glares*
lol just kidding. i'm excited to read the next chapter already :3

ooooh... and a tip. or more like my personal preference: i think the story decelops a little too fast. you could be more detailed and write it a little longer so readers can get a better grasp of all the emotions :3

woohoo ~ now this was a long comment xD