AFF username: SKID_11

AFF profile url: http://www.asianfanfics.com/profile/view/27959

Story Title: Getting the Boy

Story URL: http://www.asianfanfics.com/story/view/35066/

Genre: Humor/Romance/Drama

Chapter Length: One-shot

Main Characters && Pairings: SunHi (fictional), Onew (SHINee), Minho (SHINee), cameos - Taemin and Jonghyun (SHINee).

Rating: Not rated H.

Extra: I tried to do a twist on a cliche, so let me know if you think it was too cliche or not. :)

Reviewer: 13itt3rsw33t

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Here It Goes

* Opening *

Title- 4.5/5  

- The title was nicely hand-picked and I thought that after reading the story, it might possibly have a double meaning behind it. Like the first is to get the boy whom I have a ctush on and the second is to get the boy who maybe was just by my side waiting for me to turn to him :3 I lurve titles that has a double meaning and different effect on it, it is soo enticing, in my part :D

Poster+Background- 4/5

- How much bluer this poster can get??? It is so my fave color :3 well, anyhow, nicely picked photos from each of them to form a poster. It is just that in every picture of them lies that certain side of them that is really depicted in the story itself. But oohhh, how I wish that Minho's picture was just as big as Onew's [err, never mind me] =D And also you could have added a background for this one to liven up the whole thing more than it already had. ^^

Description && Foreword- 8/10

- A brief description and foreword is really best for one-shot stories so as not to give the whole thing away. And for the foreword, I think that you should place it with the description since it doesn't make sense to me to have that as a foreword though.

Total: 16.5/20

* Contents *

Originality && OSM-ness- 8/10

- Frankly, I have read a lot of stories before and some of the scenes in here were quite the same. BUT I like your ideas and such in the story that it makes it different from them. :3

Plot- 12.5/15

- Seriously, I love and enjoyed the plot. How the story turns around and brings us to a new pace and makes us love the next one, I really love cute one-shots ^^

Chapter Titles- 3.5/5

- Well, the chapter title seems like to be a sub title for the story, I have thought at first, what's the need of it if it is a one-shot story but never mind, cause I find it amusing on the part of the girl 'coz she's really such a drama queen and is easily being drowned in her fantasies, leading her to some more dramatic sense.

Flow- 12/15

- This really happens to most of the one-shots that I have read: if too long, [it is either that] I like it [or I don't] since it is much more detailed [or too much boring] as a one-shot story and thus doesn't keep me hanging in some parts [and even some of them ends ends in an epic fail] | if just that length or short or so-so, the story would be written in a fast pace, almost keeping out of the needed scenes that are of importance to the story being left out. Your's falls on the positive middle kinda detailed yet fast. ^_^

Total: 36/45

* Expressions *

Characterization - 12.5/15

- The characterization of the SHINee members was like O.O it feels like I am seeing a different Minho, Onew, Taemin and Jjong in here, seems like they are real <3. And the OC's chara was plainly idiotic and naive, for just to go gaga over Onew and being such. XDD

Way of writing- 7.5/10

- It was good, understandable and but you could have added a little more details to it and it would be very much pleasing to read, since details could give you more that lets you create a much more creative scenario in our heads as readers.

Mechanics [Grammar && Spelling && etc]-  9/10

- The story was reader friendly, and I have to admit it to you that you really follow the advises of your reviewer [sorry if I am being too nosy but I read the review that you posted in the foreword and it really did help you to fix the grammars and the spellings and all]

Total: 29/35

Partial Total Score: 81.5/100

Bonus- 14/15

- I really love the story in whole~XDD can't say anything else but that..^^,

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TOTAL = 95.5%

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R E C O M M E N D E D ! ! !

I wow, this is probably the first that my grade for a review  reached 90+ and I would really be glad to give this one to you..^^ continue inspiring people,

God Bless and good luck! :3