Chapter 1: I know this story is for a project, but can you please make a sequel? hehe
The more I read the more interesting it gets.

Chapter 1: your plot is really interesting and amazing as usual. Some parts are lil bit confusing but after thinking for a while I could get it. there are too much conflicts in this story, I find it confusing and interesting in the same time. But I'm sure there will be many surprises in this story right? Typical D ^^
overall, it really is an interesting story, the title is so unique, the idea is so brilliant!

Chapter 1: I think you have an interesting plot; although it didn't feel like all the pieces fit together very well. I'll just touch on the parts that really had me scrambling.

I thought Mr. Henry always brought free bread on Fridays, before and after the abuse started. Why did it suddenly start making him happy again at that specific time?

We learn that on a particular Friday he was shocked by something - and his excitement for the bread dwindled. Fast forward to a few months later and suddenly, his mom and Mr. Henry are dead, , and AJ's got the fiercest look of retribution in his eyes. Here we assume that the pair had been romantically involved, causing AJ to be angry(?). Add an exploding bakery, the vague death of his father(who we'd heard nothing else about up to that point), and a child that has sunk into deep depression and we have one very confusing chunk of text.

So his mother and Mr. Henry were together, and AJ caught them in the act. He was traumatized. Now. Here is what I don't understand. You never expand on his feelings towards his father - other than the obvious fear. You also never expand on his feelings towards his mother either. So we're left in the dark as to how something within him snapped hard enough to have him commit murder. Especially when the victims are his mother and the man who had seemingly put the sunshine back in his life.

If it has something to do with a psychological state caused by a combination of the abuse and the image of his mother with someone who is not his father, abusive or not, then 'show' us. Careful not to 'tell', though.

Also, why would the bread make him happy again? Is this another psychological side-effect? I would think that the bread would act as a trigger and bring out AJ-Hulk and he'd start murdering people left and right he was so angry.

I think you have something good here. It just needs some touching up. Hope I could help, even just a little bit, and good luck!

-strike

Chapter 1: Since I still don't really know what I'm looking for, I'll just tell you what I noticed:

(Edits)
there's the switching of the tenses, but I'm not so good in this area so maybe ask someone else to confirm this and possibly help you with it as well
there are some words that aren't really needed, (ex: “that they see him as a workaholic type of person.” could simply be “that they see him as a workaholic” or “that they see him as a very busy person”) so maybe go over see what seems away to long or just worded awkwardly(reading it out loud can help you determine what sounds nice and what doesn't)
simple grammar mistakes like using the singular instead of the plural

(everything else)
why bread? Does it hold symbolism? If so, what is it? The one that I can think of is the religious aspect: bread symbolizes the flesh of Christ
because you never state it clearly, I'm confused as to why kryber doesn't have kids. Or rather, why they can't. Are they just unlucky? Is Aiden sterile(or vice versa with Krystal, whatever the term is)? Etc
the transition of aiden suddenly killing his mother and mr.henry is slightly awkward(at least i think he killed them). Like it's too fast and too sudden. Based on how you've characterized Aiden up to that point, it seems out of character. Maybe include the influence of his father's behavior/starting of violent tendencies or highlight the fact that the Aiden that Krystal knew was slowly disappearing and expand on that instead of having it as just one sentence because I definitely breezed pasted that and then all of a sudden boom! Dead people and aiden is the murderer
if you're trying to highlight a psychological disorder, I recommend researching. Not just symptoms, but... people's reactions. Look up news articles on it, maybe stuff on who suffered from it to get a better idea on how it works
the ending seems rather abrupt. Just something about it urks me
the stuff animals urk me too. Just something about them, but that could just be me.

Chapter 1: D. You wanted so criticism on this. AND HERE I AM! hahaha! Omg. I love this. I need to know what else happened. Like...something was left out in the middle. I need to know why can't they have kids and why AJ treats the toys like his kids. He must really want to have them to end up doing such things.

But overall, I love it. This...needs a sequel!

Chapter 1: What? Is it ending already? But-- But... Oh D, don't end this like this. Please make sequel and named it Baguette or Cookies or Pizza or anything... but don't let this hanging like this.

Overall it's very well written, I could even feel how broken hearted Amber was. I want to know more how they fell in love with each other. And plis make little AJ and Krystal.

Don't leav Ahjumma hanging you!

Chapter 1: The flow of the story is good but they are some things I don't quite understand or rather clear on that. So when AJ saw his mother's body and Mr. Henry why did he look at them like they deserve it, I thought AJ loves his mother. And so does it mean that after death of his mother AJ temporary lost his memory? and the reason why he treats his soft toys as his child?

Chapter 1: Manber sorry no thank you

Chapter 1: I think you got into a wrong school. Lol

Chapter 1: OTL MAN OTL.. haha