Chapter 1: Very nicely done, there are some little faults, but the comment below mine points those out. I really liked to read it and it wasn't rushed which is a big plus for me. Good job!
Chapter 1: Mmh, the start was really good. But later on... I'm not too impressed that they openly admitted who the girl and the guy was in the supposed composed song. But, I understand that oneshots usually have a lot happening at a time so yea. ^^
Your tenses are decent, honestly. You pretty much kept to past tense writing. (: The few things I'd like to say is that sometimes you forget to place a punctuation at the end of a sentence, or commas at the appropriate part of a sentence. Other than that, it's a decent first piece.
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