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No Pot Of Gold At The End Of the Rainbow{백조} e v a l u a t i o n ❣❣ Open
• No Pot Of Gold At The End Of The Rainbow
By amusingmurdermachine
Reviewed by --placingfifth
• Title: 2/5
It's wordy and it's capitalized wrong. Not only that, but it doesn't really draw in my attention. I thought these were key factors of title, including it being able to connect to the story. I gave you a point for at least making it have a connection to the story.
• Description: 14/15
Spelling and grammar was fine. Also, it didn't reveal a lot of the story, so that is a pro. But it is also a con, which is why I took off a point. You didn't give off enough information to make me be drawn in. The way how you wrote it made it seem like any other story. I wanted something in there that would just PULL ME IN. I rememebr reading this one description. Slightly boring and didn't catch my attention, mainly because it sounded slightly cliche. But then, at the very end, they wrote, 'But then he saw something that he wish he hadn't.' That pulled me in big time!
• Plot: 30/30
Surprised? I'm giving you high points for two things: A good plot and a good plot being executed properly. I liked how it was pretty much just about her trying to get over Chanyeol. Well, in that OVA, I guess. I have never seen a fanfic that has made an OVA as well, which is why I'm also giving you points for originality.
• Flow: 10/10
This isn't really a fair judgement, as it was only one scene, but then again, you could've made the OVA longer, so I'm applauding you on the inside. You tried to subtly add in the bits of the other story so that the readers could understand, and guess what? It worked.
• Characterization: 8/15
I didn't understand their character personality a lot. I could get a good idea of it, but it was weird. I was especially confused with Soojung. She's supposed to be moody, but she's trying hard to be happy here. Other than that, that's okay.
• Grammar and Spelling: 18/20
The punctuation in the dialogue was wrong at times.
"Fine, I admit it." She sighed... [ Wrong punctuation ]
"Fine, I admit it," she sighed... [ Right ]
This is when you can use a full stop at the end of a sentence:
"Fine, I admit it." Soojung was currently being carried by Chanyeol, when she suddenly said this. [ Right ]
A full stop indicates the end of a sentence.
• Writing Style: 10/10
There's nothing distinguishable about the writing style, but it is nonetheless, a good writing style. It's the most simplest form of writing styles and it works like a charm everytime. You don't really get bored of it. You vary sentences and you use paragraphs. There are no weird symbols for dialogue and you don't use a layout. To be honest, layouts aren't the best to use for AFF. Keep that in mind.
• Overall Total: 91/100
• Extra:
This is by far, the shortest story to ever be featured. So congratulations. Also, I had to search up what OVA meant, so maybe a good idea is to add the definition in there.
Otherwise...
Congratulations! You are being featured! So dance around like a dancing queen! But if you are a guy, then maybe breakdance?
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Reviewer: boy1a4
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