Mercy 자비
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title: [5/5]
Mercy. Whenever I see or hear that word, the only words inside of my head are; Angst, action, and maybe a little bit of bloodshed. And all of those were in your story. Good job.
appearance: [5/5]
Great poster~ Love the red as weelll~ :D
foreword & description: [5/5]
According to other reviewers out there, a description is supposed to be (a) short paragraph/s which gives the reader an idea of what would happen in a story. Meanwhile, a foreword is supposed to be either an author's note, a short 'sneak peak' of the story, or what you did, stated the characters, pairings, etc. But what you did is divided your foreword into two, place the 'sneak peak' in the description, and the other part of the foreword in the foreword section. But I suppose it's alright; Some writers in AFF do it too, so I'll let it pass:) (I do that sometimes too XD)
characters: [10/10]
Characters were perfect; Especially innocent Sehun and D.O. Though I really didn't expect Chanyeol, Baekhyun, and Suho to be ruthless, I just reminded myself that it was a fanfic.
originality: [4.5/5]
Honestly, I've seen a few stories where in Exo-M gets betrayed or the other way around. But since you added a twist in the story, I only deducted .5 points :)
plot: [15/15]
At first, it was kind of confusing, but as I reread it for like, the 3rd time..It all made sense to me. (Lol) Maybe it was because I was watching, 'When Strangers Call' at the same time though. Maybe it was because I was unfocused, therefore it ain't your fault.
spelling/grammar/punctuation: [20/25]
Wrong: Before I knew it , my vision pitched black and someone grabbed my wrists from behind.
Right: Before I knew it, my vision pitched black and someone grabbed my wrists from behind.
There should be no space between a word and a comma/any other punctuation point. If some sites have word counts (like fanfiction.net), you're kind of cheating.
Wrong: I never wanted to hurt you but you chinese people make me sick.
Right: I never wanted to hurt you but you Chinese people make me sick.
First letters of important words should be capitalized. I'm
sure they taught that at school though. The rest of the points deducted were because of the punctuation problem (1st mistake), which were found on a lot of chapters. Sorry:)
flow: [10/10]
Perfect flow of the story. Sure, a lot of members were being killed in one chapter, but it felt right for me, soo..Yeah.
overall enjoyment: [15/15]
Just. OH. MY. GAAAD. This story has kept me on the edge of my seat (or bed, as of now) the whole time I was reading it. Oh, and did I mention the Pairings I spotted in the earlier chapters..? KaiSoo guarding the same floor, Chanyeol guarding the floor above Baekhyun, Jongdae/Chen ONLY looking for Xiumin 'till his last breath.. I saw what you did there, I saw what you did.. ;D AND ESPECIALLY HUNHAN, OHEMGEE. When he said,"I promised Sehunnie." I BURST INTO TEEAARRS. AT 11:08 PM. XD
My poor fangirl heart is contracting too fast. I might have a heart attack. WHAT HAPPENED TO YIFAN?! JONGIN?! ;A;
bonus: [5/5]
I feel generous today~ XD
total: [94.5/100]
Good Job! :D
Good Job! :D
P.S. Sorry for posting this, like, really, REALLY late. MIANHEE! :( So I did it in my iTouch, but when I tried to send it to my mail, it couldn't get through. T.T My mail just worked like, an hour ago. I'M SUPER DUPER SORRYYY!! :<
maybe_next_time_ouo
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