♔ Title 5/5

I think the title is suitable in the sense that you want to express how different the two main characters are in terms of personality but eventually fall in love.

♔Description & Foreword 9/10

Your description is a quote from the story, if I am not wrong, so I think that’s good. For the foreword, it’s short and simple but manages to show what the story is about, which I think is better than writing something very lengthy.

♔Plot 15/20

It’s good! The plot is quite simple and easy to understand but I think if you elaborate more and add in a few other characters/elements for conflict it would make it more interesting to read.

♔Characters 15/20

I can see by the title and what I have read so far that you wish to display opposite personalities for the two. So far, Luhan’s playful and “devil-like” attitude can be seen but for Jiyeon she just seems very naïve. So, although you have already shown how Luhan treats Jiyeon, I think you should elaborate more on their personalities to show how they are polar opposites.

♔Originality 10/15

This kind of plot is actually quite common but by adding different things along the storyline, I think it would add more to your originality.

♔Flow 15/ 15

The flow of the story is good and I like how you started the story so it’s like a flashback.

♔Grammar /Spelling/Vocabulary 3/5

There are a few mistakes here and there but overall, it’s fine. However, since this is a contest entry, I suggest you read it over again. I can point out one or two here though.

1. In the first paragraph, “sat down with nothing on her face save a small smile.”

I think you were trying to say that she sat down with nothing but a small smile on her face.

2. The last sentence of the first paragraph, “She immediately wiped it knowing I was looking at her.”

I feel that it would be better if you changed it to “wiped it away, knowing that…” it sounds more correct to me, but if you don’t want to, I guess that’s fine.

♔Overall Enjoyment 8/ 10

Since I’m more M biased than K, I think this story works for me more. Haha…So yeah, I enjoyed it so far^^

♔Total: 80/100

♔Reviewer’s Note & Tips:

Always read through your story again thoroughly before or after you have updated it so as to avoid mistakes (grammar, spelling and vocab)! That way you will not confuse readers in case the error changes the meaning of the sentence. Good luck for the contest! It’s a good story(: