It was so adorable! Buuuu~t, they progressed way too fast. I mean they just met, he brought her to his house, they kissed, and they love each other!? I think if you had put a little time gap and then showed they became an item and then ended with an "I love you". You know?
Oh wow what a lovely story. Really short but lovely.
The plot was great, you should try writing this in chapter-ed story.
Though you should use capitalized alphabets. It'll be easier to read and you know better to look? idk what i'm saying right now.
Well you get the point... hehe
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