Title: Little Notes
Author: anneistee
Reviewer: ToneHarmonic

Review:

    ♦ Title (4/5)
The title is somewhat original, but there is another one-shot with the same title. However, thought it does lack in originality, the title does relate to the story.


    ♦ Description / Forewords (8/15)
The description was simple and sweet. It didn't completely give away the whole plot, yet it gave the reader just enough to know what the it was roughly about. Your foreword, on the other hand, is different. I believe forewords are a place to put in a glimpse of your story for two main reasons. One, to lure the reader in further so that they would be more excited while reading. Two, so the reader can see whether or not your writing style is to their fancy.


    ♦ Plot (20/25)
The plot wasn't overly cliche, but it was cliche nonetheless. It reminded me me of the girl-changes-boy scenario that tends to appear in quite a few dramas. By girl-changes-boy, I mean that there's a super cheerful girl who falls for the ice prince and slowly changes him for the better. But, even though the outline of the plot was cliche on some terms, I like the fact that Hyosung isn't just another one of those characters who are happy-go-lucky human beings with no downs in life.


    ♦ Character Development (17/20)

Hyosung: Like I said earlier, even though she seems like a cliche character, I'm happy she's not a mindless blabbering idiot. There's more to her than meets the eye, and she's relatable. The way she reacts is- especially when she's trying to forget Adam- normal for any person. You showed that she isn't perfect and that she has her own fair share of emotional turmoil, even though she hides her sadness behind her beautiful smile.

Adam: Typical Ice Prince character in most of those K-Dramas. He's rich, he's successful, he can get any girl, and most of all, he's a cold-hearted bastard (well, to put it bluntly). He's cliche in terms of characteristics, but you were able to put in a background story that thoruoughly explained his actions (though not always forgivable) and make him human. A human with many flaws on the inside who looks perfect on the outside.


    ♦ Flow (10/10)
To be honest, I was a bit 'iffy' about the flow when reading your foreword. You stated that you'd be jumping time frames, so I was worried because I thought the way you jumped time frams would affect the entire story. You proved me wrong. You pulled it off really well to the point where I wasn't even confused. Really, I'm very impressed. It wasn't too fast or too slow either. Full marks. 


    ♦ Grammar and spelling (15/15)
I saw practically no spelling or grammar errors. Full marks.

    ♦ Enjoyment (9/10)
Even though I thought it was a bit cliche at first, I'm happy that it took a turn for the better. In the end, I really enjoyed it because you pulled it off so well.


►Overall score = 83/100


Reviewer's comment:
All I think you should fix is your foreword. Everything else is fine, to be honest. Your grammar and spelling is (in my eyes) practically perfect. I think you have the potential to write great stories, so don't limit yourself to the cliche stories that are hanging around. Originality in plot and story is what makes a great story along with everything else. Cliche or not, I still really enjoyed the story. Your writing style is impressive also. All in all, great story.

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